Mahou's Haven

Thanks, it's neat to hear that from people. I'm still getting used to it. I really don't think I'm good enough to enter one of the contests though. I've seen what often goes up during those and maybe I'm wrong, but they blow me out of the water. Most of my things are small stories, and aren't nearly as refined as those.

Lolol, that contest's word limit is 1000. You sure about that?

I participated, and a sore loser like me were the third person with the highest votes on its reader's award polls's finale.

Ya know, I don't think I've read any of your work. Maybe I'll have to check it out, just for curiosity's sake.

And I guess if I could produce more things like unforgiving wind I might have a shot. Surprised myself with that one. I basically poured how I was feeling at the time into it, and after awhile it just kept going. By the time I was done, I posted it not knowing what to think.

When people starting talking about how they felt when they read it, I was like "omg, they got the emotions I was expressing!" That was pretty cool to go through. It's pretty amazing when you look at something you made and see that other people are affected by it.

But I'm still unsure if I can do that kind of quality work consistently. So I'm trying to figure out ways to branch out, to make my characters more real.. both to me and my readers, whoever they might be.

I don't think can, I messed up with my series somewhere and I just stopped. v_v

Prepare to be disappointed by my poor works btw.

Start anew then. ^^

I don't know how many times I've had to redo stories or lines. And I've lost count of all the times I attempted to express something and couldn't. I think the reason I got to this point was because I didn't quit. I'm discouraged by a lot of my failures. So much so that I've been practicing in secret.

Wanna know what got me going again?

MSN status. lol, I have no idea why, but that little line box where I couldn't see everything was typing helped me. It let me be expressive and I learned about myself. Then it evolved to notepad docs, which I constantly fill with one liners even now.

But there are still so many times when I want to speak of the greens of the earth, to express the sense of mystery or excitement I feel as shadows dance across pillars in my mind and I fall short. But I keep telling it until I get it right.

EH?! @___@

^^; Sorry, did I confuse you? I do that sometimes.

No, I just didn't knew what to say, more so, I have to go, so I don't have the time for long replies, just wrote whatever.

TOOGE IS GOING TO CHINA?
OH DAMN!
Thats pretty awesome, lucky bastard

@Mahou
Take your time or else you'll end up falling down a flight of stairs and hurting your back, and then what?

The seasonal writing contest! I remember that - it was quite fun!

@ Maholix - welcome back O.o
Busy Maholix is busy...

@ Manga - looking forward to 1st July - which timezone's midnight is it though?

Mouse, where is your avi from?

Well, can;t tell you that, wouldnt be fair right? Although I do live in the US, and anyone who's been paying attention will know the state


I can't write, everytime I try i get too lazy to complete it. I did complete one 3 years ago...It was horrible

Its from Ano Hana (full name - Ano Hi Mita Hana no Namae o Bokutachi wa Mada Shiranai)

Its a really good anime, which I havent seen the end of so NO SPOILERS from those who have...

The character in question is Anaru

If you havent seen the anime yet, then i would recommend you do so - it was the best this season in my humble opinion.

So, I've yet to update my sig, but a piece just hit me. Thus, I have a new entry in my writing thread if anyone wants to venture a look.

And thanks mouse, I think I'll have to look into it.

I'm always down for reading something
Have to warn you though, I'll probably critique it

I remember Koko had quite a trip there. ^^;

One of my best friends is in China and the another is in Vietnam - its not fair I tell you!

I want some of that great food! Im stuck with the danish cuisine...

Fine by me. I'm trying to improve, so that kind of thing is welcome.




I think I need to theme this page up a bit yes?

So here's some music. ^^





May peace ever be your goal. May your heart shine brightly upon that goal, ever awash with comfort. Rest your soul here in the haven, home to those who seek harmony and life.

Come, free yourself from the judgements the world puts upon the pure, the goodly intended. The haven opens it's arms wide, allowing you in, to ease the strain, to show you that some special places exist within.

Here, hate has no place. Here the fae dance, for a balance hangs in the air. The haven is home to those who have none, and to those who have need of it. Come, stay and feel it's purpose, it's tribute to life, the very air you breathe.

Dreams come true if you just let them. Listen to the voice that whispers of future and past, guides you, bids you to be all you can be. This is the haven. It is all around you here, a window to your true and desired self.

Small bump since I changed my previous post in a big way. lol

Its quite nice, your short passage. Obviously, the concept of the simple into the rich gives it a degree of difficulty that makes your success all the more admirable, your transition from introduction into percolation in toto. I particularly liked the nice method of integrating details. Now, for the problems. A slight choppiness that can only be fixed through practice...and a few awkward stuff, the sentence with your cousin I believe. Additionally, your insertion of Susan. Don't expect this to be a priori. Not only do we have no clue who she is, the insertion makes that whole section a non sequitur statement, which works in some cases, but overall ruins the feeling, even though one might think such a capricious passage might call for such a whimisical thing, it still doesn't quite fit in. I don't want to compare this vis-a-vis professional work, so its overall a very interesting passage. Among the stuff I read on fakku this a great passage par excellence. Still, it could be better. Try writing something longer next time...and im very excited about future pieces. You seem to have a good grip on the flowing syntax that a writer needs, yet is so hard to construct.


Incidentally
@Mouse
I totally understand....Ive only been outside the country once, and I've only been to another state a handful of times in my entire life