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My (sortof) H-manga
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Ok since I couldn't find much hentai that match my preferences I decided to try making one myself
even though they still just sketches I decided to at least show some of it to you guys and ask for your opinion (although I'm not sure I'd be able to meet standards due to my limited abilities). Oh and it does have a story I just haven't put in the dialogue yet.
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0001_zpsce101089.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0002_zps9f02a826.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0003_zps589c48f5.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0004_zpsb24dabd8.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0005_zps25e304c7.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0007_zps0de2e005.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0008_zps81a20d5d.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0009_zpsf6a87b38.jpg
obviously its not done yet so there hope you like it
even though they still just sketches I decided to at least show some of it to you guys and ask for your opinion (although I'm not sure I'd be able to meet standards due to my limited abilities). Oh and it does have a story I just haven't put in the dialogue yet.
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0001_zpsce101089.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0002_zps9f02a826.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0003_zps589c48f5.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0004_zpsb24dabd8.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0005_zps25e304c7.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0007_zps0de2e005.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0008_zps81a20d5d.jpg
http://i1362.photobucket.com/albums/r691/RukaMilda/scan0009_zpsf6a87b38.jpg
obviously its not done yet so there hope you like it
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Looks pretty good, though I'm not a big fan of the short hair/glasses combo. That's just my preference, so don't worry about it. While everything looks fine, the female's lady parts look weird in some scenes. Particularly when the man is inside of her. Other than that my main suggestion would be to add some shading. At the moment it looks very 2D, which isn't a bad thing, but more detail regarding lighting would make it 2x as good. Keep practicing! Oh, and maybe add text? Just a thought :-)
Hope I helped
Edit: Missed the part where you said you just didn't put dialogue in. If you need any help just message me, I don't often browse the forums so if you make another post I might not see it.
And one more suggestion, in a lot of manga/doujins you see certain... "bodily fluids" I would suggest adding those as well as my previous suggestion about lighting.
Hope I helped
Edit: Missed the part where you said you just didn't put dialogue in. If you need any help just message me, I don't often browse the forums so if you make another post I might not see it.
And one more suggestion, in a lot of manga/doujins you see certain... "bodily fluids" I would suggest adding those as well as my previous suggestion about lighting.
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Looks really good to me! I actually like the short hair and glasses combo so this was nice. I know this is a rough sketch, but I agree shading would definitely make this great. I also think separating the scenes with panels to make it more manga-y would help organization and readability.
