I think she ought to either rehearse more or at a minimum do the review in multiple takes. I like her stage presence, the cosplay is also nice, but the "um"s and "uh"s kinda ruined it for me. I'm willing to overlook the mistake in terminology, but she really ought to spend more time practicing before going on camera. With a few more reviews I'm sure she'll improve, but for now the delivery is a bit below what I expect (and what can be attained easily). I'll keep watching and see if she improves.
hm well.... She is wearing the costume which is pretty awesome.
But yea, some rehearsal may help a little. Maybe a 'round table' style review set up will make the host feel a bit more comfortable? IDK, I feel there's something here if there was another person or a group of people chiming in with the review.
- Mistake with "chikan". Know your common hentai knowledge first.
- Too much "um" and "ah"s. Try to limit that. Or eliminate it.
- As what others say, rehearse off-cam.