Circle of Judgment

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Not your everyday fantasy novel. The title has nothing to do with the story, I just decided on it because... I'm the Dredd Judge, mothetfucker.


Chapter One: Revolting Ambitions

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On this night, the wind chilled people to the bone, and not a star or moon lit the overcast sky, but a large mob stood mindlessly around a certain town’s main well, all peering into the water with blank stares. A short, hunched-over figure approached the strange scene with an eerie, slow deliberation, tapping their cane methodically. They were no taller than any human woman and scarcely taller than dwarves or halflings.

Cloaked entirely in pitch-black robes, the only thing to set them apart from a typical deformed monster was the unusual mask they wore—it appeared to be an expression of joy and sorrow colliding, with a black teardrop under the eye of the side that wore a grin. The figure extended one hand from their cloak—terrible, bony fingers with chipped, curled fingernails, resting atop the gnarled grip of the cane.

The cane itself was notable as well—a human skull, burned to the color of charcoal, was fastened atop the shaft. The masked grotesque rested their horrifying hands upon it, and then they inhaled with great force, sending out an echoing screech that resounded through the town, for all ears to hear. All heads turned to face them, and all eyes rested upon them. All were at their beck and call now, and all their lives were in the hands of this travesty creature.

However, one boy was entirely unaffected, and stepped out from the mindless mob. The gruesome figure approached the boy, who stepped back and drew out his daggers. In response, the figure raised one bony hand, and all the townspeople, who were under their spell, turned and faced the boy with hostility.

“Hear me, child. If I wanted you dead, I would have already killed you. Not many possess the inborn resistance to magic you do… That’s the reason I’m currently intrigued. Give me another, and you might live,” a deep, metallic-sounding voice echoed coldly.

“If you let me live, I’ll kill any one person you want dead,” the boy retorted, switching his grip on his daggers to backhand from forehand.

The grotesque figure shrugged, pointing a bony finger at the mindless mob.

“You think I need a child to fight my battles?”

The boy smirked. “Your †˜battles’ lack finesse, and anyone can see a mob like that miles away. If you have a specific target in mind, you’re sure to lose them.”

The figure’s mask rang with a metallic echo that could only be likened to some twisted form of laughter. “Wordy little boy, if I were anyone else, that precocious lecture would have gotten you a slap on the face or a kick in the gut. I won’t slap or kick you, though...”

With a wave of their bony hand, the mob turned all their attention to the boy. They picked up nearby tools and weapons and began to attack the boy en masse whenever able. However, the boy leapt nimbly, vaulting himself from one person to another and using the weapons and tools they picked up as steps to jump to the next person. Within mere seconds, the boy had reached the masked monstrosity and jammed the pommel of one of his daggers into the hunchback’s gut.

“Had enough?”

The masked figure shook in place, creating a metallic noise. “Yes.”

A member of the mob struck the boy on the back of the neck, knocking him unconscious. “Interesting. High inborn magical resistance, experienced in combat from a young age… There is only one group that has such descendants. I think he’ll be more useful than an army of fools, in the long run.”

The masked creature raised their staff, and began chanting in a unique language. Screeches of terror and shouts of agony filled the town as arcane energy was drained from all of its citizens. What remained after were dried-up corpses that looked as if they’d been mummified for centuries. The grotesque figure reanimated a few of these corpses to carry the boy with them as they left the silent, lifeless town, and the skull on their cane glowed a hue of crimson as dark as dried blood.

“The smell of death is one you’ll get used to, soon…”


This is my first fantasy story, so I'm looking for any criticism you can dish out.
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Chapter Two: Patient Captivity

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The world was silent. That only lasted until the sound of water drops slowly but consistently began echoing through his eardrums. The boy opened his eyes slowly, feeling groggy. He began to feel the ground around, only to be greeted a dull rattling noise. Metal. Iron, to be precise.

“You’re awake.”

The horrible, metallic screeching of their voice was all it took to shake the boy back to reality. He looked up to see a dimly lit room and noticed his arms and legs were cuffed at the ankles, knees, elbows, and wrists. The chains were thick, and all of them were attached to different parts of the wall and floor near him. Clearly, his captor was taking no chances.

“You may be wondering why you’re here, however, that will be explained in due time. Just know that your life is in my hands, as it was from the start. If you so much as attempt to break free of the chains, I will kill you.”

The room was constructed primarily of quarried stone bricks and seemed rather new considering how clean everything was. There were no cobwebs, and there were many evenly fastened torches on the wall sconces, although they were not lit. The dim light in the room was provided by the various candles seated on small saucers along the bottom edges of each wall.

The boy looked around some more, noticing various stone furniture, such as chairs, a table, and even what appeared to be a garderobe as there was a section of wall jutting out and a stone slab for your legs to rest on as you did your business. It was a fully functional home, minus having a kitchen. This was likely the inside of a relatively new fortress or keep.

The being who captured him was seated on one of the stone chairs, taking their sweet time while reading a book, seemingly in no hurry to question the boy. They used a bony finger to trace over the line they were reading as if they had poor vision—or perhaps, it was obstructed by their mask. They hummed calmly from time to time, making a dull metal vibration pass through the air.

The book they were reading also seemed to be written in a completely incomprehensible language, but the boy was curious about it anyway, as he’d only learned to read basic texts in his own language. The figure took notice of the attention paid to the book and turned to the boy, closing it.

“Do you know how to read, child?”

“A little.”

“Good. Knowledge is power, as they say.”

The boy looked down at his chains, knowing that he would not likely be given his freedom anytime soon.

“Would you like to try reading this one?” The figure asked as they held up the book they were reading.

“I can’t.”

The figure put the book down.

“You can read, no?”

“Yes, but that’s not my language.”

The figure seemed amused by this, humming in a sharp tune, like a cold blade being drawn from an icy sheath. From this, the boy could guess that they took pride in their knowledge.

“A language is best learned when young. Would you like to learn?”

The boy nodded. “Some day, yes.”

“Then… why not today?”

“Because I’m a caged rat.”

The figure paused upon hearing this.

“You think that knowledge can only be gained with freedom? To the contrary, freedom can only be won with power, and power is rooted in knowledge.”

The boy chuckled, but the figure took exception with this response and threw at the boy's feet a different, yet similar book. They seemed displeased, but more out of pity and disappointment than anger. Their actions seemed inconsistent considering they threatened the boy before taking them captive and right after they woke up. What could they even hope to gain from such actions?

“Since you don’t want to learn from me, I give you the chance to teach yourself. This book has a translation guide written in the front. If you know your character sets, you should be fine learning it.”

The boy tilted their head. “If I do this, will you let me go?”

The figure shrugged. “Who knows? But, maybe a smart child will figure a way to sneak out without me noticing.”

The invitation was tempting, but an obvious trap. The boy had learned in training with their father that all adults had ulterior motives… learning what those were would mean the difference between victory and defeat.

“Well, it can’t hurt to kill some time.”

The figure clapped once. “That’s the spirit! I’ll be leaving for a bit. Don’t run off on me, now!”

The boy watched the cloaked monstrosity with both curiosity and suspicion as they turned and made for the door. They unlocked it with a key, but instead of closing it behind them, they merely passed through it, leaving it wide open.

It felt like they were underestimating the boy. He was being toyed with. They were testing how obedient he would be. Well, he’d definitely not play into their hands by leaving, as they probably were waiting right outside with a trap of some kind.

The boy decided he would delve into the book, but only after doing a bit of damage to his chains. Iron was strong but brittle—he could make small cracks here and there, keeping them small so that they remained inconspicuous.

He made only one crack in the chain attached to the cuff around his left elbow using his right wrist cuff, by smashing the cuffs together. He made a note of the dull but loud noise and knew he’d have to explain if his captor returned now. He decided not to do any more damage, for now, considering how noisy it was. Patience is a virtue. Just in case, he decided to push the book his captor out of reach using his foot, giving him an excuse to have made some noises.

As expected, his captor returned in short order and checked on the boy’s chains. For some reason, they did not check the cuffs, as if they were confident those were not within the boy’s ability to break.

“What was that noise you just made?”

They actually heard that? As he thought, his captor must have merely left the room to lie in wait with a trap for him. It seems they expected him to actually break out of the chains and were going to pretend not to hear the noise until he walked out the open door.

“I couldn’t reach the book, so I struggled against the chains. It’s just out of reach. Can you hand it to me?”

The figure went completely silent save for a very quiet, low-pitched vibration. They lifted up the boy’s hands and feet one at a time and examined the cuffs on each. After checking those, they seemed unconcerned about further damages to the cuffs, thankfully.

It seems likely, due to the fact that they examined only the ankle and wrist cuffs, that they made the cuffs on the wrists and ankles slightly weaker—most likely on purpose, in order to catch him in the act of breaking them—but the boy knew where and how to strike metal against metal, so that even weaker metals could break stronger ones with little to no damage.

“Alright. But, don’t disturb me again—I have important work to do out there,” they replied, handing the book to the boy.

The captor left the room in an unnatural haste, and the room fell silent once more. The boy opened the book. A translation guide really was in the first few pages, as his captor explained. He went through it briefly—it was far too complex for him, though, and even had many words and characters he didn’t understand in his own language as parts of the guide.

Perhaps, the captor assumed more of his intelligence than he’d given them credit for—perhaps, it was he who underestimated them. His captor likely took into account almost all possibilities they could think of, and if the boy managed to surprise them even once, it would be the end for the boy. He had to be more careful, more cautious, and above all… more patient.

He closed the book and set it in his lap with a sigh. He’d need to learn his own language to a more advanced level first if he was to do utilize it. His captor seemed to take some form of pride or joy in teaching others, so perhaps he could get them to lower their guard a bit if he showed some intellectual curiosity.

However, he hungered now. If he was to make it out of here alive, starving to death was certainly not an option. He would have to take the risk of eating drugged or even poisoned food, in order to survive long enough to see the world outside these walls again. His captor wouldn't have risked their own safety to capture him unless they had future plans for him... so he was unlikely to starve in their hands, at the very least.

He was told not to disturb them, though. He’d wait patiently for them to return and maybe go back to sleep until then. Saving his strength was another priority now, considering it could have been a long time since he last ate. He wasn't sure how long had passed since his capture, but considering the ravenous hunger and the weakness of his muscles, it was probably quite a while.

As the boy passed the time by examining the details of his environment more, his consciousness drifted away...
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leonard267 FAKKU Non-Writer
Amazing! I actually know what is going on! Not entirely sure what the mentor figure in the story was though. I am convinced he is the Grim Reaper.
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Chapter Three: Dubious Partnership

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The boy woke abruptly to the sound of a book closing. It was his captor, who had been silently watching over him.

“I'm no fool, child. You're too clever by half—did you think I'd actually miss a crack made on your wrist cuff? I promised you one thing… If you remember what it was that I promised, I might just break that promise. Show me you were paying attention.”

What were they talking about? A promise? All he knew was that if he was caught trying to escape, he would be killed. But perhaps this was another trick question, as his captor seemed fond of those.

“Do you not remember, child?”

“You said you would kill me if I tried to escape. However, I never tried to escape—I only tried to break my chains. If you're so confident you can stop me from leaving, why have me in chains?” The boy retorted.

The captor laughed with a sinister metal ring. “I really do have good eyes.”

“If your eyes are so good, why do you use your finger to mark the line you're reading?”

The creature went silent for a moment. “Careful, child. You were going in the right direction but you've taken two steps backward.”

The boy noticed at that time—to his captor, this was all a game. With the power necessary to enslave an entire town, it made sense that they would have an ego. However, trying to butter them up would be too suspicious and unnatural. Instead...

“Then are you talking about your judgment in choosing to let me live? What's so special about me?”

“Good question. What are your skills, child? If you can name them all, I can give you insight. However, be realistic—don't inaccurately evaluate your own worth.”

The boy sat silently and thought for a little while. There were many things he brought to the table most people didn’t, as his was a strict, yet exemplary upbringing—his father had taught him from a young age to perform feats of both physical talent and mental strategy.

Skepticism is a default attitude he’d developed in training, never taking things at face value and always looking for what the other party has to gain from it. In addition to having developed keen perception and high-level martial skills, he was given access to many different lessons on resourcefulness. An almost flawless upbringing…

However, now this begs the question—how did he receive such an upbringing in a “reputable” noble family, and why did they send him on a journey of his own? At first, he thought it was a part of training, albeit they did not mention that it was. They simply told him he was exiled until further notice, and refused to provide a reason.

He gathered information but the people who know his family were also uselessly uninformed and some even hostile. Was he actually betrayed by his own family? Or was there something larger at play here? What was his role?

“...I can tell you my skills, but since you took me in and figured all this out I assume you already know. All of these are not “normal” traits for my age. However, would you answer one question of mine?”

The figured twisted their cloaked body into a spiraling form, and it made the boy wonder if their body even obeyed the laws of reality.

“I might. Ask away.”

“What do you know about my family, other than what they tell others of themselves?”

The strange creature seemed to chuckle. It seemed that curiosity amused them.

“Your family is an ancient clan, but that is not all they are—they are reputed for being the world’s greatest family that produces assassins on the black market. You are merely a product, child. Something they produced and then unleashed on the world.”

The boy shook his head. That can’t be, right? He wasn’t the best in his class, but he was certainly among the higher ranks… why would they throw out such a valuable asset? What was there to gain from it?

“Ah…”

“So, it seems you realized something. Reveal the revelation!”

“I… am meant to cause chaos. I’m not even being used as a means to a specific end. If what you said is true, then this “exile” was really meant to force me to take extreme measures to survive.”

“Partially. However, there is one flaw with that theory—they normally only focus on the martial skill of their students, not the resourcefulness or their cunning, or their abilities to strategize and manipulate others.”

The boy tilted his head. Was that really the case? Actually, he never saw any of the other students at those lessons… he took those lessons alone, with only his father. Was his father actually aware, and trying to protect him?

“So, my father was preparing me for the cruelty of the world and the cunning of those in it who would use me… but if you knew that already, then why are you detaining me instead of putting me to death? Do you really believe I’d quietly cooperate with you?”

“Child, life is not all about controlling others. When I said you’d be more valuable than an army of mindless fools, what did you think I meant?”

The boy paused. “You said that? I don’t recall.”

The figure returned to a vaguely human-shaped form, the normal hunched-over grotesque figure they normally kept. They put the book they were holding this entire time back on the shelf and removed another one.

“It must have been immediately after I had one of my minions knock you out. I thought your consciousness would have lasted a few moments longer, but perhaps I used too much force.”

“Most likely. In that case, why?”

“Because you and I can be partners. All I need from you is to hear my story and what I plan to do.”

The boy laughed. This had to be some kind of bad joke, right? His captor expected him to work not as an underling or a minion, but… a partner? There had to be some kind of catch.

“Fine, I’m listening.”

“I come from a long line of mages, since ancient times. However, I went beyond the scope of what my family is known for and dabbled into… darker things,” They began as they twisted their body many times until it formed a horrifying sculpture of jet-black bones and flesh that resembled a tree without leaves.

“I learned a spell that allowed me to freely change the shape and arrangement of my body and its parts. In order to do so, I needed to learn a spell to seal away all of my vital organs in another dimension and draw energy to live without them. However, this form has been quite useful throughout the countless years I’ve lived.”

“Countless?”

“Yes. As a side effect, whether it be a blessing or a curse, I gained eternal life. Well, there are a few strings attached, but I’d best not reveal those. You may find the secrets yourself some day, if you’re lucky enough to live that long.”

“So, what you’re saying is, you relied on magic in order to do whatever you needed, however even magic has its limits?”

“Well, it both does and doesn’t. Nearly anything that can be done without magic can be done with it, and done better, however to replicate certain actions requires an incredible amount of power. Draining mana is how I supply myself the needed energy to cast the spells I do in an endless cycle.”

Endless cycle of spellcasting? So, from what this being said, they are always casting spells… which means that even now, they’re casting spells. If that is a true statement, then even a town’s worth of people would not provide enough energy to sustain them for long…

“Why bother with small towns like the one I was in? Their energy couldn’t amount to much in your case…”

“Ah, but you see, I didn’t plan to use them for mana originally. I simply converted them when my plans changed and I no longer needed them. Loose ends and all that.”

“Loose ends. So you tie it up by killing them all… isn’t there a spell to erase memories?”

“You’re well informed. However, that spell can be undone. Death erases all memories, because the soul leaves the body, and one cannot retrieve memories from a body without a soul.”

The boy took note of this. A soul is the binding catalyst to any form or body… and this “thing” did not seem possess a normal body, which meant that there must be a way for a living soul to animate a normally inanimate form. Otherwise, such movements would not be possible—that was, if he were a purely organic being made only of flesh and bone.

“You truly are an enigma.”

“Why, thank you. And you have a large vocabulary for a child…”

“You keep calling me child, but I’m already a teenager.”

“Oh, you look younger than your age. How old are you, anyway?”

“Why does it matter? You don’t even know my name.”

The figure twisted and turned his body until it looked like an amalgamation of black sludge that formed a laughing mask. It lifted off the ground and hovered in place and sent out a horrible clanging echo while it rapidly shook up and down.

“You caught me. I was purposefully avoiding the topic. I’m sure it crossed your own mind before, why did you not bring it up?”

The boy smiled.

“I was waiting for a moment to naturally progress the conversation with it.”

The laughing mask chuckled with a bell toll-like noise before it returned to being a grotesque hunchback with a strange mask and a black cloak.

“Alright then, let us begin introductions… finally. My name is Valissa, and I was once the most talented female mage the ever grace my family tree.”

The boy tilted his head in confusion.

“You… were a woman?”

“Why, yes! Does this surprise you?”

“Quite a bit, actually. Your demeanor was one of a psychopath who had its target in sight and enjoyed playing with their food.”

Valissa laughed with the same eerie metallic ring as they always did.

“Why can women not be egotistical psychopaths? Are you saying we’re not capable of this?”

The boy knew this was a loaded question, and no answer was correct, so he simply remained silent. The awkward silence hung until Valissa cleared her throat with a clang.

“I introduced myself. It’s your turn now, boy.”

That’s true. He should have introduced himself first, considering his position as the captive, but now that he’s being given such treatment, it’s only fair…

“My name is…”