Private School for Love

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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
Xenon wrote...
Huh, I didn't expect Danni's home to be quite so...eloquent? It certainly seems quite posh, it's interesting to see more of her personal life, though it's funny to see Chloe undermining it.

It's exciting that things seem to be taking a spooky turn, and just in time for October. Should be interesting.


Her home is somewhat styled off of my own. Mainly due to a lack of inspiration/interest in interior design ha~

I had the idea for this arc back when I was writing the second chapter, so it's just a coincidence, but a nice coincidence if anything especially with Halloween on it's way xD

Originally I was going to make a mini-arc that was like this for all four main characters but that seemed like I was basically trying to make filler and would slow the story down too much. I'll show more of their personal lives/homes when the plot demands it though, only maybe to a lesser extent than Danni's.

Anyway, thanks as always Xenon~
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
A little late for Halloween but...the ghostly chapter of ghosts/lesbian sex is here. Took time off to check out other stories of similar nature (thank you fan fiction) to try and improve my description. You might notice some difference in how I've written it. Or not. Who knows?

Chapter 8: Searching for a Spectre!

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The four companions found themselves in the dead of night, the city life roared on in the background with the odd passing car zooming below the hill the school they attended was based on. The school was entirely pitch black from within, not a single light stirred and the curtains were pulled over shut to block out the world outside completely sheltering what was inside. The only thing partially illuminating the building was the street lights below, casting a looming shadow of the school over the girls.

Melanie shivered on the spot as she stared blankly at the school, whether it was the ever-present unnerving and mysterious nature the school gave off or the chilly breeze that blew through the air Danni couldn’t decide. Fortunately Blake pumped her shivering lover with the point of her elbow and managed a smirk “Not afraid are you? If anyone, I’d expect Danni to be the most frightened out of the lot of us” Blake snickered and the jab at Danni forced her to stick her tongue out in retaliation.

“I’m not a coward!” Danni defended with a sharp edge to her words, such an unanticipated tone even managed to upend Blake and impress her somewhat. That all changed when a skeletal tap wrapped along Danni’s shoulders, freezing her on the spot as her face went completely pale and even managed to start twitching, the only thought being if screaming held any weight as to if it could in some way save her. As proven afterwards when Chloe span from behind her, exposing her slim pale fingers as the source of the wrapping, it mattered very little other than helping to prove Danni was easily startled as stated by Blake’s prognosis.

“Uh huh. Sure. You’re brave Danni; why I think that scream might have scared off a few serial killers right now!” Blake said mockingly, which resulted in another tongue being stuck out at her from Danni, still shivering herself from the fright Chloe had given her.

In response to that as well, Danni kept constantly shooting Chloe the same scowl of disapproval, but Chloe could only smile at what she deemed a contender for †˜Most adorable failed attempt at an intimidating expression ever’. She moved swiftly to link her fingers inside Danni’s own and pecked her on the cheek as a peace treaty. Danni forcibly rolled her eyes in frustration at her inability to stay mad at her lover and responded by resting her head on Chloe’s shoulder as an admission of defeat. A common occurrence in the relationship if there ever was one.

“S-So…what exactly are we doing here?” Melanie said as she continued to shiver, cursing to herself for not bringing a coat along with her school uniform, though Blake still maintained the stance that she was simply trying to cover for her fear over the school’s scary nature. A claim she denied, of course.

“That’s not a bad point to bring up actually” Blake nodded calmly and tilted her head into a suspicious look towards Chloe with a single eye-brow raised to express her feelings. “So, Chloe, what in the name of Christ are we doing here?” Blake asked with hands on her hips.

“Come on! It’s not like I have some kind of ulterior motive or anything!” Chloe nervously shook her hands with lips parted for her smile with a slightly flustered expression.

“What a suspicious way of phrasing things…” Danni said to herself looking away from Chloe while she twirled one of her long strands of hair around her finger.

“Seriously guys! It’s what I get everyone to do at this time of year!” Chloe said defensively as Blake’s eyes widened at some dawn of realisation from Chloe’s previous statement as she continued to argue her case which, for better or worse, fell on deaf ears.

“Oh son of a…” Blake rested her face in her hand and exhaled deeply into it before straightening her posture and taking a moment to stare into the sky in abject frustration “You mean the whole †˜Search for the school Ghost’ deal you start every single year?” Blake asked almost in disbelief.

“Yep!” Chloe flicked her finger at Blake in a gesture of correctness and winked.

“Fucking can’t believe I didn’t see this one coming…” Blake rested her head in her hand again and continued to curse silently to herself.

Danni, of course, had no idea what had Blake so incensed about why Chloe had brought them here. Furthermore, she didn’t understand the off-handed comment in reference to the †˜Search for the Ghost’ Chloe had eluded to the concept of †˜Ghost hunting’ some weeks prior but explained little and demanded Danni simply accept the position she found herself in and come with Chloe, though she actually only considered it an excuse for Chloe to pull Danni out of her hermit nest of a room.

“Umm…c-can I get an explanation?” Danni timidly asked as Chloe turned around and momentarily looked as if Danni had blasphemed against her god, which clearly wasn’t Jesus based on Blake’s particular speech pattern. Then Chloe bolted upwards onto her tiptoes momentarily as it dawned on her that no-one except her had actually understood anything to do with the reason they were here up until Blake deciphered it moments ago. Absent-mindedness was problem with Chloe sometimes, not often, but it had proven a problem before.

“Riiiiiiiiight…” Chloe gently tapped her head with her now lightly clenched fist as punishment and moved to take a leadership stance in front of her friends. “Okay, every year I would organise a sleepover at the school with 20 or 30 students in which we investigate the schools legends surrounding ghosts!” Chloe began to explain as a sigh escaped Blake’s lips for a few prolonged seconds.

“But it lost popularity fast since Ghosts don’t exist, so Chloe started tricking students into coming. I suppose this time no-one was stupid enough to fall for that plan other than a foreigner with no knowledge about your deceitfulness, a rule-enforcer who is too afraid to go out in the dark and a delinquent who is the stupidest one of all since she should have seen this coming…” Blake, again, rested her head in her hand which was becoming an all too frequent habit whenever Chloe outwitted her. Or at least, abused her lack of memory over things she couldn’t care about.

“I would just like to clarify that I am not afraid of the dark” Melanie murmured to herself as Blake ruffled her hair trying to comfort her as Melanie had already manoeuvred herself up against after seeing something (she thought) move in the shadows. Blake would have usually considered this one of Melanie’s rare romantic gestures if it wasn’t for the fact she would probably use Blake as a human shield.

“Anyhow, we’ll split into two teams and spend the whole night searching up and down for the school ghost!” Chloe took on a more serious stance and eyed Danni with a disturbingly evil smile that already made her thighs grow white-hot with both anticipation and dread.
“Me and Danni, Blake and Melanie: Those are the teams” Chloe held out a white piece of A4 paper with a list of instructions, rumours and explanations surrounding several different mysteries about spectral sightings in the school.

Blake glanced at the multi-coloured font written in some kind of old-timey style suited for lords and ladies in the 18th century and whistled “Wow, never before have I been so insulted by both colour and someone’s effort! Congrats” Blake said blatantly sarcastic as she took Melanie’s hand and started to head inside “But not like I have anything better to do…” Melanie struggled a little and started manically coming up with excuses like her hair not being straight enough for the ghost or that maybe she should rush home to get a lucky key-chain first. Regardless Blake seemed to either not listen or not care. Or both.


Chloe watched as the two girls eventually disappeared out of sight down one of the hallways off to the side of the building and gently moved to brush a lock of her golden hair behind her ear and turned to Danni, offering her beautifully elegant fingers “Ready? I’ll keep you safe my love” she smiled a pure smile. Once again Danni saw that pure elegance she so helplessly fell in love with, similar to that day where the sunshine and sweat had made Chloe gleam so brilliantly the moonlight gave her a similar quality in beauty. Silver sparkles seemed to glimmer and burst to life from her outstretched fingertips all the way to the centre of her pupils. Danni so easily took that hand that could break down her physical and emotional barriers like they were nothing, the simple stimulation of their fingers intertwining slowed down the world and made every insecure feeling inside her disappear all at once. Leaving her with the brightest and happiest of smiles streaked from side to side of her face.

“Mmm, let’s go…” she nodded grasping on tightly as Chloe set them both a brisk pace with Danni occasionally tripping over her own feat trying to keep up with Chloe.


The two girls (Chloe and Danni) found themselves on the ground floor of the eastern end of the school, walking amongst the empty hallways that drastically turned at ninety degree angles either end of the halls with the stairways leading off the sides.

Chloe gently paced herself just a little quicker than Danni, walking with her hands behind her back and her skirt gently rocking from sound to side with each step that she took. For a brief moment, no longer, Danni was mesmerised by the rhythmic shaking in front of her before she shook herself back to reality.

†˜Not the place, nor the time’ she thought to herself as she bumped into a stationary Chloe and tumbled backwards onto her behind with her back resting against the wall below the windows. “Ouch…” She mumbled to herself rubbing her sore behind “Next time I have to keep those fantasies in check and watch where I’m going…” Danni complained as Chloe crouched down looking a little irritated by the bump she suddenly received.

“Looks like those glasses don’t help much huh?” Chloe poked the bridge of Danni’s nose after momentarily lifting her glasses up and then responded with a cheeky smile that was too energetic and vibrant given how it was nearing midnight. Suddenly Chloe’s eyebrows shot up and she pursed her lips “Wait, what did you mean about fantasies?” in an almost instinctive movement, Chloe dropped down to her hands and knees like some sort of animal stalking its prey. She moved until they were mere inches away, Danni struggled to stop her eyes from fluttering half shut at the tantalisingly close distance their lips were.

“U-Umm…I dunno…” Danni tried to dodge the question as she felt the hot fingers of Chloe begin to slowly run up her leg and press down up her inner thigh teasingly, causing her to squirm and jerk her legs; her face turning crimson red.

“I think you’re lying” Chloe sang each syllable as her lips gently brushed Danni’s and sent a spark rifling through Danni’s body before Chloe pulled away but kept her hand planted safely up Danni’s leg where it seemed to have set up camp.

“S-Stop it…you know I hate being teased…” Danni begged in a whimper behind her hands she used to cover her mouth.

A chuckle, light and somewhat malevolent in nature escaped from Chloe’s mouth. She moved her head next to Danni, her soft breath brushing against Danni’s neck. The warm air lapping gently against her like soft kisses. “If you tell me, I’ll stop teasing you…” she said sensually and nipped Danni’s ear, biting down gently on it causing erratic whimpers to escape Danni’s mouth.

“I…I was thinking about how cute your butt looks” Danni shut her eyes tightly out of humiliation from admitting her perverted thoughts surrounding Chloe’s behind. Quickly the warm breaths retracted away slightly from Danni, not so that she couldn’t feel them but they had definitely withdrawn so to put a larger distance between Chloe and herself. Danni crept and eye open and saw Chloe was still on all fours eyeing her like a hungry animal but with a look of curiosity about her.

“Want to see it?” Chloe asked blankly.

“S-See what?” Danni responded with, confused by the question.

“My ass. Want to see it?” Danni felt like she had been blindsided by an oncoming truck. Her face shot to scarlet in terms of colouring when she had only just recovered from her prior embarrassment. Though that was only because of her immediate bemusement.

“W-W-W-W-Whaaaaaat?!” Danni yelped as her jaw hung on its hinges “Are you crazy?!”

“How am I crazy? Do you not find it attractive?” Chloe had entered into the realm of thought where her desire for Danni would cause her to try every means of seduction to tempt Danni into agreeing to meet out her demands, even if she was blunt about it. Plus her innate stubbornness that lead to her never giving in always resulted in victory, not that Danni ever really complained too much.

“No…it’s cute…” Danni buried her head in her legs “I thought we were looking for a ghost?” Danni muffled into her knees. Chloe bent down and spread Danni’s knees apart to see the smallest stain appear on Danni’s pink underwear.

“Doesn’t look like that’s on your mind too much…do you know the story of the ghost here?” Chloe’s sudden change of topic managed to make Danni forget about the lewd position she found herself in with her legs widely spread at this point. Danni naturally shook her head as she knew very little about the school she attended, hell she hardly even knew how they managed to get into a multi-million pound/dollar private school at night without needing a key. “They said a girl who attended this school secretly brought her lover in here at the dead of night, and after making love he killed her!” Danni gasped at Chloe’s melodramatic tone “Now they say she wanders the schools hall looking for vengeance! But you can appease her by making love to your own lover…” Chloe ran the tips of her fingers against the surface of Danni’s panties, only applying pressure to the small space where her most sensitive node was. The stimulation caused Danni’s breath to increase in frequency and made her toes curl up inside her shoes. “Think you’re up for it?”

“Knowing you, you planned all of this to get me in this position…” Danni tried to look as resistant as possible, but Chloe knew all of her weak spots so she was resigned to looking vulnerable mixed with ecstasy from the light touches being applied to her “J-Just no teasing…” Danni begged by gripping onto Chloe’s shoulders tightly, digging her fingers into the soft material of her shirt.

Chloe gave a simplistic nod and began unbuttoning Danni’s shirt, unhooking her bra and then tossing them out of the way so she could have unrestricted access to Danni’s breasts, cupping the perfectly rounded mounds of flesh in her hands occasionally squeezing them or pressing onto her hardening nipple with her thumb. Danni bit down on her lip at the toying of her sensitive nubs. At the sight of Danni’s more haggard breathing escaping her mouth in tandem with the rising of her chest, Chloe decided to start attacking her breasts with her tongue, lapping around the nipples and sporadically biting down on her nubs gently resulting in Danni throwing her head back in a combination of the indescribable pleasure and pangs of pain from Chloe’s teeth.

Chloe felt one of Danni’s hands brush along her hair in a thankful yet urging way, moving down the cup her chin, brushing her thumb along her jawline and looking at her with half-glassed eyes of desire “Please…l-lower now…” Danni begged and Chloe could see the moisture running outside of Danni’s panties and dripping down to the floor below.

“Of course” Chloe began to slip her hands inside Danni’s panties when a flash of red caught her eye and she stopped in her tracks, letting the elastic slap the sides of Danni’s pelvic region as Chloe retreated her hands and sat back in shock.
Danni rubbed her side lightly from the flicker of pain looking down to her pained regions

“Ouch! Come one Chloe I’m not that much of a masochist…” As Danni finished her sentence she realised what had caught Chloe’s attention. A girl sat before them. She wore a red tracksuit hoodie and white shorts of the same brand that looked archaic and almost as if it belonged in some museum. She had long blood-red hair and amber eyes that glistened at the two girls who she continued to look between in calm interest as she rested her head in her hands.

And that’s when Danni realised it wasn’t the presence of the girl that startles Chloe so, it was everything below her tight shorts: After the point of her knees what should have been her shins morphed together and formed a wispy tail. Exactly like a ghost.

“Don’t stop on my account, I thought it was really cute of you to be honest Denise” The girl spoke plainly and with a sharp smile forming at the corner of her mouth.

“D-Danni actually…” Danni said in a meek voice as her entire body shook.

“Ah, my apologies. I only just found you two so I wasn’t sure” The girl gestured with a flick of her wrist for the two of them to continue “Am I putting you off too much? I’m told I can do that. Haven’t seen two women have sex before actually…strange given this school would be dyke central…” The ghost-girl covered her mouth “I’m sorry do you take offence to that? I don’t come from a very accepting time for your people so that can be an issue sometimes” the girl put her hands together in an apologetic way and bowed. Well, as much as a floating entity can bow.

“A-Are you a ghost?” Chloe asked, excitement now taking the reins of her tone in place of shock and fear that still dominated Danni.

The girl tilted her head in a little bit of confusion “Well duh, you knew that since you summoned me right?” The girl asked almost like a straightforward concept, but it was hardly that. Stood before them, despite all logical reasoning, was an honest-to-goodness spectral visitor.
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Xenon FAKKU Writer
Ooh, very cool. That was amusing how it started out so innocent, I didn't expect the ghost to exist in your world, that's really neat. As always, I enjoyed the nuisances behind their interaction again this time. And that lime-y scene was quite spicy as well.

But, I can't believe you'd break it there, I can't wait to read how they react in chapter 9.

I also wanted to point out this sentence and how it appears somewhat...unfinished:

DatYuriThough wrote...
“You mean the whole †˜Search for the school Ghost’ deal you every single year?” Blake asked almost in disbelief.
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
Xenon wrote...
Ooh, very cool. That was amusing how it started out so innocent, I didn't expect the ghost to exist in your world, that's really neat. As always, I enjoyed the nuisances behind their interaction again this time. And that lime-y scene was quite spicy as well.

But, I can't believe you'd break it there, I can't wait to read how they react in chapter 9.

I also wanted to point out this sentence and how it appears somewhat...unfinished:

DatYuriThough wrote...
“You mean the whole †˜Search for the school Ghost’ deal you every single year?” Blake asked almost in disbelief.


Thanks for pointing out that unfinished bit Xenon, altered it slightly to sound finished now.

I am a master of suspense! That and if I made it any longer the site wouldn't let me post it. Hence why I can't put it in the initial post or alter anything there. If the chapters get longer I may have to break them up into multiple posts.

Glad you enjoyed it regardless~
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Xenon FAKKU Writer
DatYuriThough wrote...
Thanks for pointing out that unfinished bit Xenon, altered it slightly to sound finished now.

Glad you enjoyed it regardless~


Oh yeah, no problem. Though, it still looks a bit weird, I think you hit enter accidentally and forgot punctuation so you may want to try again.
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
New Chapter already. Some (and by that I mean a fair chunk) of lemony goodness with some extended interaction with Ghost-girl.

Chapter 9: Ghostly Revelations

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Chloe’s face exploded into a flurry of emotions: Excitement, pride, happiness and a little bit of fear over the unknown all rolled into one. She leaned forward and peered at the girl in front of her.

She didn’t look like what a typical ghost would appear like, apart from her generic wisp of a tail, as she wasn’t transparent. But she was undoubtedly not human, well not alive the least. Her floating had a rhythmic motion of moving both up and down by a few inches which resulted in her having to mover her eyes to keep focus on whatever she wanted to focus on when looking at either Danni or Chloe. However, her eyes were mostly fixed on Danni, who had momentarily forgot her chest was exposed.

“Is she okay?” The ghost pointed towards Danni as she wrinkled her nose at occasionally losing track of Chloe’s eyes whenever she moved up. Chloe, remembering the girl whom she so closely had made love to moments ago, swivelled around and looked on in guilt at Danni’s shaking body (almost certainly out of fear, though it must have been cold given how winter was setting in, mixed with her half naked condition). Chloe shot over to Danni’s bra and handed it to her girlfriend before helping her clean herself up and make Danni more presentable to their spectral acquaintance. “So I suppose you have no plan on continuing? Bummer.” The girl said with a twinge of disappointment in her voice as she yawned.

“I-I’m not gonna make love right in front of a complete stranger…” Danni said with a flushed expression as she closed her legs to hide her embarrassment and moved to sit on her knees.

“But you’re absolutely fine to do it in the middle of the school? Or masturbate to your classmates…” The ghost said with a snide indifference, as if making fun of Danni was her goal but she really didn’t care if it stuck or not as she fiddled with her own fingers clearly getting less and less interested.

Danni’s face exploded into a sea of crimson, her eyebrow above her right eye twitching at a violent rate and her mouth contorted into a scribble of a shape “How…how did you know…?” Danni stumbled out, her fear now taking place of embarrassment in her internal list of †˜Emotions currently most effecting Danni’.

“I do live here you know? You just completed the summoning so you could actually see me. I’d been watching over this school since….now when did I die?” the idea one could not remember something as important as one’s own death and the casual nature in which the ghost-girl referred to it as befuddled Danni. Saying she was an air-head wasn’t right, but comparing her to Blake’s coolness would also have been inaccurate since she didn’t have the volatility of a bomb to go with that coolness. “1973? Yeah I think that was it…because I was 13 when the Moon landing happened and I was 17 when I died…maybe?” Again, she glossed over such significant moments in her own life like they hardly mattered.
Danni considered that this girl was so absent minded that she had died over something like tripping, or getting hit by a bus when the light was clearly still green. The former seemed more farfetched since she couldn’t even begin to consider how someone was so clueless that they could die that way.

That moment Danni decided to take the time to look at the girl more thoroughly as she held her head in her hands and thought about her demise as she practically lead in the air. Her long red hair was of purest crimson, draping down her back to her tight shorts that exposed her curves perfectly. Her hair was styled similarly to Danni’s in that it was a straightforward fringe with the rest of it kept quite neatly. Her breasts were slightly more developed than Danni’s and looked as if they were prepared to leap out of her sporting jacket. Her features were pretty, dimples at the centre of her cheeks whenever she made an expression that was not straightforward or calm (not often mind you). She had a small button nose that wrinkled whenever she was frustrated. Her sleeves were a set too long for her resulting in her thumbs being pressed against the inside and her fingers just barely poking out.

Chloe ended the remarkable silence, given how either screaming or constant questions seemed to be appropriate for the situation. “How did you die?!” Chloe asked without shame, and then realised her own stupidity by burying her face in her hands and groaning.

“Chloe! What’s wrong with you! That’s personal!” Danni scolded the usually calmer and wiser girl, who had turned into a hyperactive puppy which, while adorable in its own right, wasn’t suitable at the current time.

“No it’s fine. We all die eventually. Nothing to be ashamed of really” The ghost shrugged “I fell down some stairs and broke my neck” she pointed to the back of her neck where a dark red line marked the back of her neck. Clearly some kind of symbol of her death, Danni wondered for a moment if all manners of death would leave a ghost with permanent reminder of their death. But then she shook those thoughts away and focused on how she was almost lost for words how her theory had come to pass.

†˜Note to self. This world is insane and so is everything in it. Logic doesn’t work!’ Danni thought to herself as she put on her best †˜Both shocked and yet saddened by knowledge face’ as she was honestly more frustrated by the knowledge rather than saddened by it but felt it was better to show some sympathy.

“My own fault. Didn’t look where the step was and flipped over…kinda comical really…” the girl scratched at her crimson hair and up righted herself and sat on the ground with her back straight. “My name is Arial by the way” the girl curtsied as best she could without both legs and a skirt.

“You mean like the thing on a car?” Danni asked with a tilted expression.

“No not like a…” she growled to herself “…Yes like the thing on a car…” she submitted.

“Wait…” Chloe looked around suspiciously for a moment “Why did having sex summon you?” Chloe asked as she locked eyes with the ghost, who smiled erotically. The first time Danni had seen the girl smile and it was…odd. Like it didn’t suit her exactly.

“I can only summon myself on nights. Some bullshit to do with the †˜Laws of the Universe’ or something” Again, she shrugged and didn’t look completely sure herself of what she just said as she continued to lack knowledge over important topics. “I only appear to those truly in love. Take that as a compliment, I was enjoying watching you two go at it” She smirked as Danni sat back on her behind and buried her head in her knees. Suddenly the girl’s ears seemed to perk up almost as her eyes glowed purest orange before returning to their more human state. “Oooh! Someone else is enjoying themselves…” she licked her lips “Well apparently some other girls are enjoying themselves, I’m kinda bored with you two since you’re asking generic questions and won’t even eat each-other out while you ask them…boring if you ask me” and before a reaction could be made, the ghost completely disappeared in a flash of red.


Danni’s world had been completely turned upside down by the Ghost. Logic no longer applied, she was always an advocate for science over the supernatural but now she was ready to check if there were fairies hidden under her bed. †˜Not sure why they’d by under my bed but what do I know…?’ she thought to herself. At most from tonight all she expected was a few laughs with friends and another chance to bond with Chloe. Now she had met an absent-minded and perverted ghost-girl.

Danni let out a sigh though, the experience was at least over for now and she could use the time to think over what had just happened and in more detail, going over what this meant. She wondered if that goldfish she flushed down the toilet when she was five would be haunting the toilet of her house in Belgium.

“Phew…” she exhaled in relief as her heartbeat returned to a less erratic pace and a smile returned to her face. “I’m glad that’s over!” Danni exclaimed as she went to look at Chloe but felt a tug on either side of her thighs until her legs had been moved back into the position they were moments before Arial had arrived. “C-Chloe!” Danni yelled as Chloe now placed herself between Danni’s legs so she couldn’t close them.

“You’re still wet” Chloe breathed into Danni’s ear with a seductive, passionate and soft voice before she nibbled her ear and began grinding her knee against Danni’s panties. “If I let you stay like this you could get a rash…” Chloe made up any excuse that came to mind to get into Danni’s pants. Or get them off as the case may be.

Danni caught her voice as it stifled as Chloe applied more pressure on Danni’s pussy and bit harder into her ear, causing Danni to take quick, shaky gasps at the pleasant warmth mixed with the slightest spike of pain that spread throughout her body. Just as she liked it. Instead of her usual resistance to Chloe starting up and taking the lead, Danni wrapped her arms and pulled Chloe closer as she bucked her hips against Chloe’s knee to increase the stimulation and muffled her urging voice into Chloe’s shoulder “Chloe…my Chloe…” she said in the sweetest and most sexually driven voice she had ever spoken in.

Chloe halted her affection with Danni’s ear and gently kissed Danni in a passionate way, gently mixing her tongue with Danni’s in circular motions. After a few seconds of sweet kissing Chloe broke it and moved away so her lips were tantalisingly close to Danni, who whined like a child having their favourite toy taken away from them. Chloe licked Danni’s lips and practically tore Danni’s shirt off of her with such desire she had turned into a wild animal. She calmed herself and unhooked her bra for the second time in what could have only been 20 minutes at most. Danni grabbed Chloe’s head with a tight grip and pulled Chloe into a kiss, refusing to let it end until her lungs burned and screamed for oxygen. Panting and calling Chloe’s name over and over again, Danni looked hardly like the innocent and shy girl she usually would strike people as.

Chloe slowed down the speed of her knee that was now coated in Danni’s sticky juices. She lowered herself and placed her hands inside the sides of Danni’s moistened underwear and looked up with eyes asking for permission. "Not going to slap my sides with them this time?” Danni teased as she traced her finger up against Chloe’s lips, resulting in Chloe kissing her smooth fingers.

“Promise” Chloe responded and Danni lifted her hips and legs so Chloe could slide off the only barrier stopping her from viewing her Goddess in natural and complete beauty. Her mouth grew dry with desire, head swirling with thoughts of how she could please Danni. She settled on Danni’s favourite: Directly swirling her tongue around the hardened node at the top of Danni’s pussy and sticking a sole finger inside to rub the walls within.

“W-Wait…” the honest and forward Danni retreated back within herself as she picked up Chloe’s head in her hands, gently stroking Chloe’s face and trailing a sole hand down her golden locks. “You too…naked I mean…” Danni begged with tears forming in the corners of her eyes from the pleasure she had been feeling. Chloe moved in and kissed Danni’s eyelids.

“Okay” she said simply and unzipped her skirt fist and slid it away before continuing her efficient and quick removal of each article of clothing until, just like Danni, only her knee-high socks and trainers remained.

Chloe now returned to Danni’s pelvic region, trailing her tongue down her groin until it rested just above the sensitive node of nerves just above her entrance. She brushed it once with her thumb and watched Danni’s back spasm as she flung her head back and gasped for air, struggling to force herself to be silent.

“Don’t” Chloe said rather assertively and Danni met Chloe’s eyes with her own half-glassed “I love your voice, don’t keep it all pent up. I want to know when I make you feel good” Chloe demanded and Danni nodded quickly as she removed her hands from her lips and placed them on top of Chloe’s shoulders, before shoving Chloe down onto the ground and straddling her thigh with her own knee now placed firmly against Chloe’s own pussy.
“You always…make me feel good…dummy” Danni led down on top of Chloe’s body and began to lick up and down the mounds of flesh that were slightly bigger than her own. Teasing the nipple by licking around it and then moving to suck on it aggressively for only and instant before she moved to the other to repeat the process. Danni rarely got the opportunity to do this to Chloe, since her girlfriend was always too stubborn with making Danni feel good, and while she appreciated it, it got frustrating being on the receiving end all of the time.

Chloe didn’t seem too frustrated with being on bottom for once, she kept her eyes focused on Danni, guiding her whenever Danni looked uncertain and reassuring her that she was doing fine. Well, more than fine with how she was feeling right now, like the glow of the morning sun was reverberating through every cell in her body a thousand times over.
Danni eyed down Chloe’s body and looked to see Chloe’s current state, her slit was covered in juices at this point. She softly moved her teasing hand away after giving Chloe a cheeky flick to her nipple (causing Chloe to moan) and then carefully pushed the tip of her finger against her entrance.

“Go ahead” Chloe said to the pleading eyes as she kissed her gently. For a moment Danni just rested her head on her companion in love’s chest and smiled before slowly putting her index finger inside Chloe. Chloe’s hip bucked against Danni’s pussy, nearly sending her over the edge from her previous servicing from Chloe but just about managed to control herself. Soon, after Chloe had purposefully began rubbing her thigh against Danni and Danni’s own thrusting and rubbing of her finger inside of Chloe, the two of them screamed each-other’s name in a mix of euphoria and love before collapsing on top of one-another. Their chests quickly rising and falling at the same time as they looked for what seemed like an eternity before sharing a soft kiss and clinging together.

Danni had the desire to lie there with her lover the entire night, but was reminded by her that they would be in pretty big trouble if they did when the teacher’s came in. Chloe brought out a packet of wipes and tissues from a small bag she had brought with herself that night (suspicious, Danni thought) and they cleaned themselves up before placing their clothing onto themselves. Chloe brought out of the bag a spare pair of panties that Danni kept at her apartment (which confirmed Danni’s ideas about how Chloe had planned these sequence of events, except the ghost of course) for Danni to change in to.

Suddenly they heard the distinct scream of someone from the other end of the school “WHO IN THE NAME OF GOD WATCHES TWO PEOPLE HAVE SEX?!” someone shouted as a crash of furniture could be heard.

Chloe and Danni looked at each-other with a smirk and spoke in unison.

“Blake.”

They took each-other’s hands and walked off to the sound of more yelling, prepared for what they assumed was the initial meeting between Blake and the perverted Ghost Arial.
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Xenon FAKKU Writer
Very nice, I really enjoyed the emotion surrounding the lemon this time around. I could appreciate Arial's personality, but it seemed somewhat off for someone who had grown up in the 50s-60s, but I suppose it's alright considering she was a ghost and probably picked up on modern social queues somehow, like referring to oral sex on women as "eating out."

Anyway, I just knew it would be the other pair she went to see when she left. I was thinking she would return to them since she's psychically aware, after all.

I wonder if she'll be present when they go back to class as normal or if this was just a Halloween treat.

Also, here are some fixes and commentary I've spoiled:

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DatYuriThough wrote...
She didn’t look like what a typical ghost would appear like, apart from her generic wisp of a tail, as she wasn’t transparent. But she was undoubtedly not human, well not alive the least. Her floating had a rhythmic motion of moving both up and down by a few inches which resulted in her having to move her eyes to keep focus on whatever she wanted to focus on when looking at either Danni or Chloe. However, her eyes were mostly fixed on Danni, who had momentarily forgot her chest was exposed.

“No it’s fine. We all die eventually. Nothing to be ashamed of really” The ghost shrugged “I fell down some stairs and broke my neck” she pointed to the back of her neck where a dark red line marked the back of her neck. (You say 'neck' three times in succession, 'back of her neck' twice.) Clearly some kind of symbol of her death, Danni wondered for a moment if all manners of death would leave a ghost with permanent reminder of their death. (Again, the word 'death' used too closely in succession.) But then she shook those thoughts away and focused on how she was almost lost for words how her theory had come to pass.

“You mean like the thing on a car?” Danni asked with a tilted expression. (I'm not even sure what the reference is. What is on a car that is an 'arial?')

Chloe halted her affection with Danni’s ear and gently kissed Danni in a passionate way, gently mixing her tongue with Danni’s in circular motions. After a few seconds of sweet kissing Chloe broke it and moved so they were tantalisingly close to Danni, who whined like a child having their favourite toy taken away from them. Chloe licked Danni’s lips and practically tore Danni’s shirt off of her with such desire she had turned into a wild animal. She calmed herself and unhooked her bra for the second time in what could have only been 20 minutes at most. Danni grabbed Chloe’s head with a tight grip and pulled Chloe into a kiss, refusing to let it end until her lungs burned and screamed for oxygen. Panting and calling Chloe’s name over and over again, Danni looked hardly like the innocent and shy girl she usually would strike people as.

“Okay” she said simply and unzipped her skirt first and slid it away before continuing her efficient and quick removal of each article of clothing until, just like Danni, only her knee-high socks and trainers remained.
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
Xenon wrote...
Very nice, I really enjoyed the emotion surrounding the lemon this time around. I could appreciate Arial's personality, but it seemed somewhat off for someone who had grown up in the 50s-60s, but I suppose it's alright considering she was a ghost and probably picked up on modern social queues somehow, like referring to oral sex on women as "eating out."

Anyway, I just knew it would be the other pair she went to see when she left. I was thinking she would return to them since she's psychically aware, after all.

I wonder if she'll be present when they go back to class as normal or if this was just a Halloween treat.


Thanks Xenon.

Yeah I intended to include a line about how her speech pattern was altered through watching over people for several decades. Probably include that next time around.

Thanks for the edits, I'll take care of that later. Less time to edit given my schedule. The whole 'car thing' was in reference to an aerial, I'd put that in since they are phonetically somewhat similar and I made the joke through Danni's misinterpretation.
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
Chapter 10? Chapter 10. And the introduction of our antagonist...if you can call them that.

Chapter 10: Irritating Patience

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Danni was sat at her desk during another tedious and mundane day of school. She twirled her pen around her finger and thumb as she slowly became less and less interested in her lesson and the lecture her teacher was giving. It was something about the fundamental concepts of monomers and polymers. Nothing she hadn’t already learnt from her expensive home-schooling that her father had paid for during her family’s years of travelling across the globe. Not to mention that she also didn’t care for chemistry. Danni always had an aptitude for science and it always kept coming back to her as something she would like to consider perusing in the future. Though her father made it very clear she was to study business at a master’s degree level and also look into taking a minor into law if possible. As the eldest child of her father she was destined to take his position one day. An inevitability she had come to accept some time ago. And after her absence to accompany her three friends in their late night adventure of ghost searching her father had moaned on for most of the weekend about how he expected better of the role-model for his younger children. Not that she ever thought going out for one night was a bad example to set, yes maybe the lack of informing her parents wasn’t so superb but love makes you do crazy things.

Danni let out a half-conscious yawn that was just a touch too audible which resulted in her teacher narrowing his eyes to the young foreigner “Excuse me Miss Wakeland-Ulistani, do you think you don’t need to learn what’s on the upcoming test?” he scolded as Danni perked up and blushed out of embarrassment at being called out by her teacher. Snickers could be heard throughout the class and Danni quickly apologised for her lack of attention. She had briefly considered being somewhat snide in her response by saying something along the lines that she already knew the whole subject from the first page to the last at this point, but decided it was better to just apologise and move on: No point in making enemies.

Danni sighed to herself as the snickering stopped and her teacher went back to his dull explanation of the topic at hand. Suddenly, a girl’s head popped out of the ground next to her with blood-red hair. If it was any other person on this planet, in any other situation, they would probably scream bloody murder. But Danni was already conditioned to the appearance of the girl next to her appearing around her.

“Wow, he tore into you huh?” Arial said as she tilted her head to the side until it was practically resting on the floor she had appeared from. And if not for the constant bobbing up and down, Danni may have actually thought it possible for her to be lying on the floor below. However, Danni simply gestured for the phantom to leave with the flick of her hand in a shooing way motion. “Rude” The girl complained before trying to pay attention to the course as Danni mindlessly scribbled some notes into her notepad to give the illusion that she was actually doing work. A skill she had refined throughout her public/private school life. Arial groaned “This stuff again? Chemistry has been drilled into my head thanks to being perpetually stuck here…” Arial stuck her tongue out at the teacher in annoyance, trying to vent her frustrations.

†˜Well at least we have that in common…we both know this course to death…quite literally for her’ Danni snickered at her own thought and caught a glimpse of her teacher’s death-threat like stare before she began hastily writing down equations and definitions from the textbook in front of her.


Finally the bell went and Danni leaned back in her chair and stretched her arms before relaxing and slumping into her chair and replacing her drained and bored expression with a pleased one. “Lunch! And then study periods for the rest of the day!” she waved her hands in the air in triumph after surviving the morning periods of mathematics, physical education and then the onslaught of chemistry. She then felt a large and dull thud on the top of her head, causing her to shudder out of pain. She swirled around to see her assailant: Blake.

“Nice job pissing off Mister Mathews. You must be the first person to do that who isn’t me” Blake gave a half-compliment, half rebuke for her actions. “Wanna head down to the cafeteria?” Blake asked as she shoved her textbook (the weapon of the crime that was assaulting Danni) into her bag and ran her fingers down her shoulder-length black hair, making sure it was flat and neat for once.

Danni rubbed her head trying to make the pain disappear after Blake’s attack and pouted at her friend before her eyebrows shot up at the surprisingly neat and proper Blake, her hair slightly longer than usual “Hey um…what’s up with…that?” Danni pointed at Blake’s hair and Blake blushed at the question.

“N-Nothing…I’m just working tonight is all. It makes more sense to look all †˜prim and proper’ before I go to work” Blake turned away and grunted to herself while biting her bottom lip.

“Why haven’t I seen you like this before? How often do you work?” Danni asked, her naturally inquisitive personality taking precedence over the growing desire for food urging its way all around her body from the pit of her stomach.

An irritated snort came from Blake as she crossed her arms and narrowed her eyes at Danni, but quickly relented before quickly counting to ten to herself “She’s just interested…curious…it’s okay for her to be like that…” Blake tried to reason with herself ignoring the presence of Danni and the lingering girls in the room.

If Danni had learnt one thing about Blake since coming to the school, it was that she hated opening up and talking about herself to anyone. Even the smallest of details about her life were considered taboo by her. Despite Blake’s never-ending number of barriers that she erected in order to keep people out, Danni had never felt deterred from trying to get closer to Blake.

“Maybe we should just get lunch for now…” Danni decided this particular topic was better saved for another day however. For the briefest of moments, she swore Blake managed the tiniest of smiles before returning to her scowl.

“I appreciated it” Blake said dryly and picked up her guitar case “Let’s go”


The two of them made their way into the cafeteria area. It was designed similarly to a restaurant’s layout, with tables surrounded by chairs and some booths off into the corner (since these were the more popular venue to sit at thanks to the leather seating, they were already taken at this point). Off into the centre of the room was the area where the cooks would prepare the food on the menu for that day. Danni and Blake took a tray and looked up towards the listing of food hanging from the wooden canopy overhead.

Danni tapped her feet on the tiled floor below as she hummed gently to herself, slowly considering each and every choice.

“Want to be any slower?” Danni immediately considered it to be Blake but realised her dark haired friend had turned her own attention to someone else. Danni followed Blake’s gaze to see a red-haired girl of a similar height to Danni. She had a freckled face and a well-endowed body with a curvy and sleek figure to match. She had her would be cardigan tied around her waist and the top two buttons of her white t-shirt undone to express her already too obvious breasts. She wore a cocky smile streaked from ear to ear.

“Leave her alone. I’m sure you can afford to wait a few more seconds” Blake put her tray down on the counter in front of them and crossed her own arms over her chest whilst giving her menacing glance to the girl.

The girl laughed heartily in an attempt to mock Blake, making her scowl increase from its natural resting place on her face and elevating it into a more aggressive placing. “Oh is Miss Dayle going to get mad and throw another punch? If you do that then my Daddy will simply get the principal to kick you out” the girl laughed off Blake like she wasn’t an issue, choosing to ignore the cold look Blake gave her like it was nothing.

Blake leaned her head in to Danni’s ear for a moment “For the record, she is one of the reasons I hate rich girls” Blake turned her attention back to the girl who had just passed her off for nothing more than a speck of dust and chuckled to herself “Tough words coming from Milk-For-Brains” Blake rolled her eyes at the girls apparent anger at what Blake had said. Whatever it meant it clearly got her riled up.

“Ugh…’Milk-For-Brains’?” Danni asked quizzically and, again, Blake leaned in.

“She’s not too popular amongst those of us who got here because we work hard. So once, we left a bucket of milk above a door and when she opened it poured all over her. I swear it was dripping out of her ears for days” Blake giggled uncharacteristically for herself.

“Why milk?” Danni asked.

“Because we couldn’t get into the chemistry lab to get acid” Danni wasn’t sure if Blake was serious, but she thought it better not to pursue the thought. At this point Danni realised the girl in front of them had her own little gang of 6 or 7 people stood behind her, and they had attracted a decently sized crowd of other students who were curious as to what was going on.

“Who are you exactly?” Danni asked, tilting her head in puppy-dog kind of way as if trying to physically emphasise her lack of knowledge. The girl ahead of her snorted derisively.

“So you’re that new girl I’ve heard about? Dating Chloe was it?” Whilst it was no secret that Danni and Chloe had a romantic relationship, it felt slightly awkward and embarrassing being made so public like that especially by a girl who apparently had no volume control. “Hmph. I guess I should, at the very least, grace you with my name” the girl sounded pompous. Danni hated pompous.

†˜Grace? Who do you think you are, the Queen?’ Danni thought to herself, a twinge of resentment forming inside of her at the girl who was speaking.
“My name is Justine” Justine then turned her attention back towards Blake “Making yourself look good for a change? Going to work at the whorehouse?” Blake grinded her teeth at the comment.

“Must have taken you ages to come up with that retort. Not that I’d expect a serious response from someone who’s never had to work for anything in their life before” Blake clenched her hand and Danni grabbed the material lining her arm in an attempt to remind Blake she wasn’t alone. Plus there would be witnesses if she did decided to do anything.

Suddenly a familiar blonde parted the crowd and walked in between the two sides, her emerald eyes scanning the scene out in front of her before sighing to herself “Please keep the line moving, some students are trying to get their food” Chloe demanded and pulled Blake and Justine away, whilst gesturing for Danni to decide on her food quickly, in an irritated way whilst trying her best to look compassionate as possible for what Danni had to go through. Even if it was only minor.

“Oh…um…the risotto?” Danni quickly decided and had the food dispensed onto her plate with a carton of orange juice to go with it.


Meanwhile Chloe dragged the two girls off into the corner of the room with her so she could discuss what had happened between them, away from the disappointed crowd who didn’t get to see any action from what had seemed like an electric interaction. Chloe rubbed her temples in frustration, she didn’t usually have to deal with situations like this, especially since the two girls would usually make it their mission to avoid each-other (based on previous experiences). Blake would usually avoid Justine because she knew her own volatility and how Justine would exploit that, and Justine made it a point not to deal with lesser individuals (which made up 95% of the student body).

“What was the problem this time?” Chloe asked, trying to feign some sort of interest. She couldn’t care less, they had fought over every possible example you could think of and more, plus the idea they would fight was a foregone conclusion at this point. Moreover, what she wanted was to eat her lunch with Danni and these two were slowly draining that time away.

“She started it” Blake said carelessly, losing her own interest in the conversation before it even began. Twirling one of her longer strands of black hair in her finger.

“I don’t think so! It was your friend who was wasting my time with her own indecisiveness!” Justine defended herself.

“Ever heard of patience? It’s this really cool thing that everyone else has!” Blake angrily grumbled back.

“Enough! You two are already giving me a headache…” Chloe rubbed her temples again with both of her hands before exhaling to calm herself down “Blake. You know better than to talk to Justine…and Justine,” Chloe turned her attention to the other girl “Try and be more patient with others. Not everyone obeys by the same time schedule you do; try to respect that” Chloe finished and gave each of them a cold stare to drive her authority home.

“Fine whatever” Blake shrugged.

“I will…respect your authority Chloe” Justine looked away as if she was defeated and the two girls parted ways and left the cafeteria through the opposite sides of the hall. Chloe let out a deep breath of relief and drooped her shoulders as she relaxed.
“So glad that didn’t end up like the milk incident…” Chloe admitted before correcting her posture.

“Where’s Blake going?” Chloe turned around to the new voice and saw Danni stood with her plate and lunch in hand, her tilted expression looking unreasonably cute as always.

“Huh? Oh Danni there you are!” Chloe completely ignored the question as she held herself back at the last second to stop herself from hugging Danni as to avoid getting her uniform covered in risotto. “Oh right…Blake…” Chloe considered the question for a moment and then clicked her fingers “Usually after something like that happens she usually goes off to vent her anger alone. So long as she doesn’t take it out on anyone it should be fine” Chloe waved it off as Danni frowned.

“We’re her friend’s right? So we should go make sure she’s all-right!” Danni placed her plate down on the empty table by them and crossed her arms, signifying her defiance to any other idea.

“If it was anyone else we’re talking about I’d agree, but this is Blake. She’s not known for her tolerance, especially when she’s already…moody shall we say?” Chloe argued with a dissatisfied expression “I want to do something but it would only serve to anger her. Best we just give her some time before trying to help” She compromised.

“Not having it! We’re going to help Blake right now!” Danni clenched her fists “Blake hates being alone…she only looks angry †˜cause that’s her regular expression…she wants others to get closer to her” Danni took a moment before speaking again, her words were true and straight as an arrow “I’m not going to let Blake ever be alone! That’s my job as her friend!” Danni angrily stormed her way off the way Blake had went, leaving Chloe holding her hand over her heart with lips slightly parted and a flushed expression spreading by the second.

“B-But…I wanted to share lunch…” Chloe pouted before stomping on the ground quietly to herself “Why does a determined Danni have to be so sexy and persuasive?!” Chloe moaned to herself before jogging after her lover.
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Xenon FAKKU Writer
Chapter 10.

Hoo boy, my jaw dropped at the line from Justine. What outright hostility. I wonder if girls in their age bracket really are that outright with their insults. Good thing Chloe can be a good diplomat. It also pleases me that Arial is still floating around the school.

Nice addition, Yuri. The escapades of this group continue to grow more interesting with each chapter.
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
Chapter 11. A little shorter than usual but that's because I've broken it up into two Chapters since it would have been overly long otherwise. Anyhow, heart-to-heart talks are all the rage these days.

Apologies if the French is not accurate, my GF is incredibly busy recently so I haven't had the chance to confirm its accuracy.

Chapter 11: Her Sister

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Danni skulked throughout the lower hallways of the school searching for Blake. If she knew Blake, and she liked to think she did, then Blake would be in some isolated area to burn off her anger. How Blake did this Danni didn’t know, but she certainly imagined it wasn’t counting to ten and breathing in and out deeply. It probably involved breaking something, Blake wasn’t known for her carefulness or subtlety in these situations.


Danni found herself momentarily distracted by the thin blanket of pure white sleet forming on the emerald grass outside, the wind sprinkled white with flakes being carried along. She leaned against the window sill and stared at the beautiful simplicity and yet artful nature the weather carried with it.

“When was the last time I saw snow?” Danni asked herself, her mind traced back through her travels alongside her family due to her father’s job. Before coming to America she had spent a year in Saudi Arabia (her father’s native land) and prior to that a whole 5 years across several Asian countries such as Japan, China and a brief stint in Indonesia. Though they had always bounced around to other areas of the world and always seemed to have a cold but snowless winter. “Maybe when I was six? That’s the last time we were in London…” Danni’s thoughts came to an abrupt as she heard several powerful chords and notes (of what she presumed was a guitar) blast from the other end of the hall and cause her to fall onto her behind with a thud before groaning as she raised herself back onto her feet. “Who would be so obnoxious to…? Blake. Definitely Blake” Danni came to the conclusion after realising that Blake played in a band as the lead guitarist at a local nightclub.

She quickly jogged down the hall towards her and Blake’s tutor room, the hall was completely devoid of life, leaving only the aggressive tune and Danni as the sole occupants for what seemed like miles. Danni took a quick scan around to make sure there was no teachers or students anywhere near the room she stood in front of. Slowly she turned the nob of the door open and was met with a blast of air that sent her ribbon-tied strands of her hair flying behind her. The source of this was Blake’s extremely loud guitar riffs coming from an amp she had connected to her guitar. She sat slightly hunched over her guitar, strumming quickly and with vigour; an angry expression plastered over her entire body. She wore some sound proof headphones (something Danni wish she had of considered for this situation, perhaps something to remember for future Blake tantrums?) so calling her name wouldn’t provide any help.


Danni shut the door soon after realising all of this and poked Blake’s shoulder, the sudden stimuli causing Blake to startle and almost slip from atop the table she was sat on but she somehow managed to regain her balance, the last chord slowly fading into the background. Blake slowly rose from her hunched position and lowered her headphones so they hung around her neck. She looked at Danni with a hurt expression and wet eyes, overshadowing the anger that Danni previously noticed.

“What is it Danni?” Blake asked with a tired voice as she tried straightening her hair that had become frizzled from her obvious head banging. At first glance at this new revelation that was Blake, Danni had no immediate response other than to gawk and fumble around her words.

“I ugh…just wanted to say…thank you Blake” Blake’s body lurched backwards at the admission of gratitude as she raised her eyebrows simultaneously.

“For what? For yelling at you? Or for getting mad? Christ you make no sense” Blake rubbed her temples and let out a singular breath of mental exhaustion.

Danni chuckled to herself, cupping her hand over her mouth as she struggled to keep her laughter contained before she started outright laughing “No you dummy! For standing up for me” Danni smiled cheerfully at the end of her first sentence as she placed her hand over her own chest “You could have just let Justine tear into me, but you stood up for me. You protected me” Danni walked along the edge of the room while letting her hand trail along the bookshelves and instruments piled into the sides of the room the two girls found themselves in. Danni then began to speak again, this time her voice was slightly more hollow, with a sound akin to sadness “You know Blake…I’ve been a big sister my entire life…pretty much anyway, but I’ve never really had the ability to stand up for myself. I’ve been weak, unsocial and scared of what could happen if someone made fun of me…honestly, I think if anyone needed an older sister it’s me” Danni turned her head so Blake could see some small ebbs of water run from Danni’s eyes and gently dampen her sweater vest “So when I met you and saw how strong of a person you are: Willing to hurt yourself to protect your friends. I thought of you like a big sister in a way” Danni clenched her fists as she headed for the climax of her speech, her body shaking like an earthquake had abruptly begun. “Which is why I can’t help but get so mad at you for not coming to me when you’re sad enough to cry!” She cut the distance between herself and the dark haired girl to nothing and grasped tightly onto Blake’s shirt “I’m your friend! And so is Chloe and so is Melanie! In fact Melanie is your girlfriend! You love her so much that you can’t properly put it into the right words!” Danni lowered her head into Blake’s chest and started sobbing “So come to us when you’re hurt! I can’t make everything magically better but I can damn well try! We’ll all try! When that stupid girl makes fun of you I’ll be there for you!” Danni gripped so tightly into Blake that her knuckles went bright white. She expected a barrage of insults to come from Blake, something involving using the name of the Lord’s name in vain or maybe something about how being a rich girl that meant it was automatically impossible for Danni to comprehend what Blake was feeling. None of that came. Not a single word of abuse. A warm hand brushed Danni’s brown hair while several wet droplets followed after.

She looked up momentarily to see Blake’s eyes streaming with tears, only for the hand that was stroking her to force Danni’s head so far into Blake’s bosom that she couldn’t see the moistened expression of grief, sadness and even a little bit of pride and relief that was mixed into Blake’s face. “You…I don’t want you to see me so weak…” Danni felt the numb vibrations of Blake pounding her fist into the table beneath them. More tears fell atop Danni’s head as Blake’s breaths became fragmented and stifled “Damn it. Damn-Damn-Damn-Damn it!” Blake yelled as she finally released her grip in Danni’s head, allowing the foreigner to finally look up at the expression of pain that seemed so uncharacteristic of Blake.

“Blake…?” For a few brief, yet terrifying moments, Danni had thought that Blake’s tears were caused by what she said. Thankfully Blake wiped her eyes dry and managed a small smile.

“Sorry for making you cry…pretty crappy of me huh?” Blake pulled her knees into her chest and rested her forehead on them. “So a sister then…are you sure you want me as that? In many ways I’m a lot weaker than you…I can’t keep my emotions in check and I’m nowhere near as honest…” Blake lifted her head up and lowered her legs so they hung off the edge of the table “I had no idea you cared so much that you would cry for my sake…” Blake finally regained competent control over her breathing and her tears had finally stopped, whereas Danni on the other hand was still flowing like a waterfall.

“Of course I’d want a sister like you! You’re the entire reason I haven’t been reduced into antisocial wreck since coming here! You were kind enough to show me around! You even motivated me to chase after Chloe! So yes I want you as my sister Blake! I’d love to have you as a sister! Hell, I’d even say I love you!” Danni yelled as she tried (and failed) to stem the wave of liquid that gushed from her tear ducts. Upon realising what she had just said, Danni’s entire body went red hot with embarrassment.

“Ugh…that’s in a platonic sense right? Not the †˜I know it’s wrong since we’re sisters but love is love right?’ kind of way?” Blake asked as she slightly drew back from Danni.

“O-Of course! I could only ever love Chloe!” Danni immediately replied.

“Oh thank Christ…” Blake gave a sigh of relief, which seemed to irritate Danni slightly.

“What? Am I not good enough for you?” Danni inquired and Blake let out a long and frustrated groan.

“Oh for the love of…it’s not that! C’mon now! You realise how awkward it would be to deal with that situation!” Blake drooped her shoulders “And I thought you were the most serious behind me…” Blake moaned and Danni tried to stifle an infectious laugh that quickly moved onto Blake and caused her to start laughing.

“So are you okay now? I don’t need to yell again do I? Because I’m going to be brutally honest: I don’t want to make a habit out of it” Danni made a mock gagging motion “Hurts my throat. I prefer to be quiet” Danni smirked a little deviously, Blake thought she had earned that snide response.

“I’m fine. Hopefully my eardrums will make a speedy recovery too” Blake retorted with a small punch of endearment into Danni’s arm.


Just then, Melanie and Chloe burst through the door panting, looking slightly relieved. Not at the fact Blake looked calm, no actually, happy would be a more accurate term if anything. No, they were relieved at the lack of structural damage to the room. They actually had expressions of incredulousness, whatever Danni had done it had clearly worked. Melanie and Chloe each took a quick mental note to ask Danni later about what she had done to avoid the catastrophe.

“What took you so long Chloe?” Danni tilted her head, her countenance changing to that of confused “Weren’t you right behind me?”

Chloe sighed again and bore her weight against the nearest wall “Merci Mon Dieu!” Chloe entered into her one of her French episodes “Elle est fantastique!” she even began to chuckle. Quickly she composed herself again and straightened up “Désolé!” Chloe took a few seconds to breath and switch herself back to English “Sorry I mean, I went off to find Melanie…I thought she would have the best idea on how to deal with an angry Blake”

“Although it looks like you managed to control Blake pretty well from the looks of things…” Melanie said with widened eyes, a mix of gratitude and shock that someone else other than her managed to calm Blake down that quickly.

“Could you all please stop talking like I’m some kind of wild animal being tested on?” Blake grunted to herself.

Melanie then took this opportunity to tackle into Blake, knocking her lover onto her back with a thud “You’re so stupid! Next time you come find me when you’re mad! I hope Danni gave you an earful!” Melanie protested as she blushed, still embarrassed to be so open in front of Blake, not to mention the other two girls that awkwardly whistled as if nothing was going on.

“Great. Another lecture. Now I’m going to be deaf in two ears…” Blake muttered as she brought a single hand down her face to signal this frustration as she patted Melanie with the other.

“Great, now we’ve all made up and are happy again…” Chloe’s hands began to tighten into fists and a very visible shadow of rage seemed to loom over her face “But Blake…” Her voice trembled “You took away my precious meal time with Danni!” She broke out into a blubbery, clingy mess of frustration “Someone has to pay for that!”

“Oh for the love of Christ…” Blake smiled as she led back on the table and heaved a large breath of air “I’m stuck with you idiots aren’t I?” They all shared another infectious laugh. All problems were sorted. Well, except the glaring hunger they all felt over missing out on lunch.
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Xenon FAKKU Writer
Haha, that was indeed rather cute, touching, and even humorous. And no worries, I understood a bit about what you were saying in French, although I'm not sure if the grammar was correct. I got the gist of it, anyway.

Looking forward to chapter 11 part 2, I suppose? Or maybe it'll just be 12.
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
Oh me and my procrastination~ Here's Chapter 12 anyway's. Glimpses of Blake's family life.

Chapter 12: Warmth and Freezing

Spoiler:
After the end of the school day, the four friends had separated into their couples. Danni and Chloe went off to spend the cold winter afternoon at Chloe’s apartment (Chloe made it no secret as to how they would spend the afternoon) while Blake and Melanie silently walked down the road into the main city. Blankets of pure white snow began piling up as time went on, a bitter cold began to occupy the air and every breath they took visible shape. Melanie shuddered, cursing her decision to not bring herself a jacket or coat to wear.

Blake groaned and took her arms out of her red winter coat with a fur style to the ends of the sleeves and seems of the hood. “Here. I don’t need you getting cold” Blake said indifferently.

“I-I’m not some kind of charity you know!” Melanie reacted as coldly as the temperature, maybe twice as so. However, by this point Blake had an inbuilt †˜Melanie-English’ translator in her head. This particular phrase happened to mean †˜I’d feel guilty if you got cold though…’ or something along those lines.

“I’ll be fine. Take the damn coat and give it back to me tomorrow. Just don’t forget your own next time” Blake looked at her and gestured for her to take it.

“Yeah but I…” Melanie began but Blake practically shoved the coat into her face “Okay…” She threw her arms through it and felt the resonating heat of Blake passing into herself. †˜So soft…’ Melanie thought as she bundled herself tighter to try and make the feeling intensify.

“Feeling better?” Blake asked as she grasped Melanie’s hand with her mitten-wearing own. Melanie let out a nod with her bright red face, trying to avoid Blake’s stare and yet wanting to look back at Blake’s eyes so she could take in her beautiful face. “Your home is pretty far into the city right? You should stay around mine for tonight. It’s getting pretty bad out here right now…” To emphasis this, Blake tried to stomp through the snow on the sidewalk, only to find how dense it really was (coming up to her ankles).

“What’s up with you? You’re being way too considerate for the real Blake…” Melanie stared suspiciously.

“Nothing…Danni just got me thinking about how I act is all…” Blake stopped at the drive of her house, a small two floor high building that looked neither unimpressive nor too accommodating. “Are you staying the night or not? You can keep my coat for tomorrow if you do” Blake had a mischievous smirk about her.

“O-Okay…” Melanie relented and took Blake’s hand again before Blake retracted it to remove her mitten, retrieve her house key and then unlock the door to her house.

The inside of the house was rather plain, beige coloured walls with some cracks in them, littered with photos along them. Directly ahead of them inside the hallway was some wooden stairs with a closet on either side. Off to the right and left was an archway that lead to a room each, one a dining room and the other into some kind of lounge/kitchen hybrid.

Two small children with dark black hair popped around the arch into the kitchen and saw Blake and Melanie, their eyes widening at the sight of the girls.

“Momma! Suzie brought Melanie!” The child exclaimed happily. He was a boy, around 8 years old with neck-length black hair and an energetic-like nature. Next to him was another boy, of the same age but with much shorter and neater cropped hair who looked slightly more curious than energetic but still with a happy disposition.

“I told you not to call me that name Cameron…” Blake moaned to the young child, who responded by sticking his tongue out.

“Melanie?” A woman, much like Blake in appearance, but with longer hair tied back off down one side of her shoulder and along her chest, appeared around the corner. “Oh what a lovely surprise Melanie! Did Susan-” the woman noticed her own mistake “Did †˜Blake’ invite you over?” She made air quotes over the title that Blake chose for herself, which only served to anger the brooding girl more and increased her scowl.

“Mother…” Blake growled at her mother, who only threw her head back in laughter at the fury that had started to plaster all over Blake’s body like it was some kind of empty threat.

“Oh come on Blake! You sound just like your Father: Moaning and groaning at the most inconsequential of annoyances in your life. Not to mention when you roll your eyes at me, oh! I swear people can hear it sometimes!” Blake’s Mother laughed again as her children joined her in their merriment over Blake’s scowl.

Melanie smiled, their family life was something to be marvelled at. And even when she stole a glance towards Blake she could even see the shadowy-haired girl with the tiniest of smirks along her mouth and even a hint of blush appearing.

“I-If it’s not too much trouble I’d like to spend the night. Blake told me it was for the best” Melanie said as politely as possible, showing a gracious countenance as she spoke.

“Oh there’s no need to be so polite Melanie! You’re at the Dayle household, no need for rules and mannerisms here!” Blake’s Mother seemed to jump just a little off her feet at the sound of a ringing coming from the kitchen “Oh my! That must be the timer! I better go serve dinner; Blake will you set an extra plate for Mel~a~nie~?” she asked in a singsong tone before spinning around to return to the kitchen before Blake could even respond in her snidely planned way, to which she rolled her eyes at.

Blake shouldered her bag and sighed “I guess dinner first then” She turned to Melanie with a raised eyebrow “Should I run a bath instead…and maybe get you a fresh set of clothes?” Blake turned away to hide her blush. The source of which had been her discovery of Melanie’s soaking wet shirt from the snow that had melted into it and the accompanying shivering that Melanie’s body had put on display. The combined effect helped to outline Melanie’s bra and made her breasts jiggle from the shivering. †˜Red-laced bra…nice’ Blake thought to herself as she covered one half of her face in embarrassment †˜Not the time for that…have some self-control for Christ’s sakes…’ Even Blake’s innermost thoughts still abused the most Holy’s name.

“O-Oh…I think I see what you mean there…” Melanie went pure Scarlet and lowered her head at to avoid making any kind of eye-contact with her lover whilst pulling the coat together so she could conceal her damp shirt and bra. “M-Maybe that would be a good idea…we don’t want to catch a cold” Melanie nodded and Blake cocked her head back to look at her tense lover, eyes firmly shut closed as she furrowed her brow.

“I didn’t mean the both of us!” Blake said perhaps too loudly, which caused Melanie to shrink lower into her own body.

The strawberry-blonde girl pointed to Blake’s own clothing “Idiot, you’re soaking too!” Melanie lurched out of her hunched expression to yell furiously at Blake, like she did whenever Blake broke a regulation.

Blake cast her jade gaze down to her own uniform. Whilst it was nowhere near as revealing as Melanie’s had become, the brief time she had been subject to the snows unrelenting descent upon her without a coat had also drenched her own clothing and she could feel the slight tingle of the cold sinking into her skin. “Shit. Well it would be pretty crap if I caught a cold because of my chivalrous nature…” Blake said un-ironically which elicited a small snicker from Melanie.

“Yeah right…Blake Dayle, the White Knight!” Melanie proclaimed in an exaggerated way.

“Shut up Miss Enforcer” Blake quipped back with a smirk before leaning around the corner of the archway into the kitchen “Hey Mom! I’m going to run a bath so Melanie doesn’t die of frostbite!”

“Charming as ever…” Melanie muttered to herself.

“Okay dear, I’ll handle things on this end!” Blake’s Mother responded over her shoulder as she began dispensing whatever it was that she had prepared for dinner. Melanie couldn’t get a good enough look as she was ushered up the stairs and Blake simply didn’t care. She wasn’t a picky eater.


Melanie stood in the middle of the bathroom, observing the worn tiled walls which were faded to an almost lime colour at this point. Cracks were the main features along the walls, tubes of toothpaste were rolled to the very end in order to get as much out of them as possible. The bathtub looked mostly fine, but the handles on the tap that controlled the heat of the water was hanging by its hinge, forcing Blake to hold it in place and slowly crank if one way to achieve the warm water. From this room alone, Melanie could see the financial state of Blake’s family wasn’t anything to boast over. Not that she didn’t know that already, from the moment she started dating Blake she knew that Blake was overly careful with her money. Hell, even her siblings’ clothing were just some of Blake’s more masculine hand-me-downs.

“Is your Dad working late Blake?” Melanie idly asked as she tried to find a topic of conversation while Blake gently tested the water with her fingertips. Cursing at the heat and quickly withdrawing.

“Yeah he is. Crap. If it wasn’t for this weather I could work tonight’s shift at the club…” Blake moaned as she through off her sweater-vest and began rolling her socks down her legs.

Melanie quickly turned away from Blake as she seemed to tantalisingly strip down to her underwear, the shorter girl blushing “O-Oh I see…sorry you have to spend it with me instead…” Melanie carefully removed her wet clothing until she was down to her own purple underwear, expensive cotton fabric lining her bra and panties “D-Do we really have to share a bath?”

“Yes of course we do! Water is expensive and I don’t want to start a new bath just so it’ll be warm” Blake lectured Melanie about her own situation. Melanie sighed, thinking that she should be thankful that Blake had forced her out of the cold, given her own coat to keep her warm, and invited her in for food and a warm bath. A small smile slowly crept along Melanie’s face. She and Blake weren’t the type of couple who could proclaim their affections easily to each-other and when they did it was usually few and far between. But, when one of them made the effort to show concern and love to the other it carried far more importance and weight than any other symbol of adoration.

The two of them dipped themselves slowly into the searing hot water, Blake cursing and Melanie biting down on her lip to avoid doing the same. The water, despite being scolding, helped to relax the two girls muscles and warmed them to their very core. Blake manoeuvred herself so Melanie was between her legs and rested her head on Blake’s chest. Blake’s usual calm heartbeat had exploded into an erratic pounding. A gentle flush coated her body and appeared warmer to Melanie then even the bath’s warm water.

Melanie felt her own chest, the exact same pounding hit her as it did Blake. Melanie’s cheeks also flared up in heat as Blake’s hands gently moved over her breasts and cupped them, softly massaging them. “B-Blake?!” Melanie said in shock as Blake started kissing along her jaw, before moving down Melanie’s neck and ended her light teasing by tenderly biting into her skin, eliciting a light moan from Melanie. Blake quietly continued to bite and tease her way along Melanie’s body, always making sure she never caused too much pain for Melanie. Blake moved to circle Melanie’s nipples with her fingers and brush over each one with her thumb. Melanie’s legs started to jerk from the sensation sending a buzz all over her body. Her own breathes turned incoherent and urging with the heat between her legs turning into an inferno.

“Are you still cold?” Blake leaned into Melanie’s ear and whispered, before tracing the rim of her ear with her tongue. Melanie mumbled some kind of desperate response for Blake to continue and Blake smirked “You in the mood then?” Blake continued to tease, she obviously could tell that Melanie was franticly begging for Melanie to touch her sex and send her over the edge.

“Fuck…touch me Blake…” Melanie grabbed Blake’s hand and brought it below the surface and disappeared below the shimmering water. Blake clutched Melanie’s chin in her hand and turned Melanie to face her, bringing their lips together and invaded her mouth with her aggressive tongue. Melanie brought her clenched hands over her chest after having all the oxygen inside her stolen in one quick act. Blake broke the kiss and Melanie gasped over and over, her eyes glazed with desire. “I love you Blake…” Melanie’s words were broken and fractured between her hot and inconsistent breaths.

“I-” Blake began to close the distance between their mouths as a yell quickly broke them apart in shock.

“Blake! Melanie! Dinner is ready, are you two done yet?!” Blake’s Mother yelled from the bottom of the stairs and Blake sighed a little while Melanie tried her best not to look frustrated.

“Maybe another time then?” Blake smirked as she stood out the bath and answered her Mother, telling her that they were on their way. Blake threw a towel around herself and began drying herself off. †˜That’s the second time I haven’t been able to tell her it back.’ Blake lamented to herself as she grinded her teeth, stealing a quick look at Melanie as she pulled on Blake’s more gothic clothing. “Next time...” Blake said absentmindedly with the smallest of sincere smiles along her face.

“What was that Blake?” Melanie asked as she fiddled with the buttons of Blake’s black shirt.

“N-Nothing at all!” Blake pulled on her own shirt, trying her best to dissuade Melanie’s curiosity at her honesty of her own feelings. Despite that, the half-dressed Melanie moved over and despite her own feelings of embarrassment: managed to envelop Blake in a warm embrace.

“Thank you Blake…for everything” they both managed a smile. Perhaps it wasn’t time to be as open and caring as Chloe and Danni, but even the smallest of actions can have the biggest of impacts.

“Yeah well…you are a pretty special person to me” And for the both of them, that was close enough for now.
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
Good news is all my school work is done for the foreseeable future so chapters should come out a little more regularly. Unless I procrastinate more ;3

Either way it's time to meet an eccentric character and some changing room smut. Ohhhhhh yesh~

Chapter 13: Art is Eccentricity

Spoiler:
Danni stretched out her tired limbs from her physical education class after being perpetually tackled during a game of football (or †˜soccer’ as her American classmates referred to it as). Her body had become lazy and heavy, almost dragging herself about. Sports weren’t exactly where Danni excelled in the school curriculum, she was more of an academic, philosopher and problem-solving type of student. She enjoyed trying to figure out how far object †˜X’ will travel if thrown at a speed of †˜Y’ when it weighs †˜Z’ and other such situations.

Danni rolled her right shoulder as sharp reverberations of pain hummed from the joint she had fallen on after being tackled by one of the academy’s football players (American, not European this time) who Danni swore she had seen hanging around Justine when they had met previously in the lunch hall. “Ouch…if that was an act of war…” Danni slumped in the empty hallway “I’m screwed…” she gently sobbed through the pain as she shouldered her bag on her left side as to avoid any potential additional strain on her weakened area. Danni took a small glance around at the sterile-white hallway ahead and behind her, taking in the resonating silence. Given the large size of the school most halls ended up being devoid of any life. Not to say the student body was small, but given how it was a school for either girls who were exceptionally skilled or exceptionally rich it didn’t have the largest student body, combined with the size of the school equalled some very empty areas of the buildings that encompassed it.

She ended up just spending time walking and thinking to herself, internally debating whether or not seeing the school nurse or reporting her treatment was a good idea. She came to the conclusion that both ideas were stupid, the pain wasn’t debilitating just a low irritating pain she could do without and she had no real evidence to suggest the tackle was by design made to harm her. Plus Justine could use her squealing to the teachers against Danni anyway. It was best to just grit her teeth and ignore if for the time being.


Danni kept mindlessly wandering around the many hallways, doing her best to make sure to avoid her friends so they wouldn’t question her lack of excessive movement with her shoulder or her occasional grimace when she did move it. Blake had been present for the injury but didn’t push Danni far over it and ended up focusing on things that were related to the match.

Danni then wandered into the art block (an area of the school she had yet to explore) and was soon whistling to herself over the extravagance and style the block had. Whilst the more academic and scientific blocks had the sterile, boring, lifeless white walls, ceilings and floors that Danni had become accustomed to.

But the art block was something entirely different. The walls were a variety of different styles of art, handprints, mosaics, collages and many other forms that Danni hadn’t heard of before. She even saw a chair halfway embedded in a wall with the words †˜The intention of anything can be changed’ Danni was almost certain it had some kind of artistic or deep philosophical meaning to it. But it was lost to her, why a chair of all things had to be the symbol for that message just seemed to be mocking the artist’s intentions rather than seeing them through. “Ohhhh…that’s what it was meant to do…subvert the artist’s intentions to show it could do that to all intentions…clever?” Danni still seemed uncertain.

She walked on just a bit to see a girl painting on the floor, except she wasn’t using a brush but her own finger tips. She was early on into her work so Danni couldn’t exactly make out what she was trying to make, it simply appeared to be a mesh of colours. The girl had braided twin-tails either side of her head, they were light brown tied with green hairbands. She fiddled with her glasses that kept drooping down her nose from being on all fours and looking straight down at her †˜art’. She was shorter than Danni from what Danni assumed based on the length of her slightly scrunched up body from her position she took. Perky but small breasts were restricted beneath her shirt and vest, both of which like the lower portions of her arms were stained with various different coloured paints.
“What are you doing?” Danni crouched down and tilted her head with a slight smile. Lately her confidence had grown thanks to her friends to the point where she could greet and hold short conversations with new people.

The girl looked up with a slight scowl on her face as her glasses dipped down her nose, against her will, once more. She analysed Danni with a slow and slightly intimidating stare that measured Danni from toes to eyes. For such a small and cutesy looking girl she had an unapproachable aura about her, like a Rottweiler tightly chained to a fence would if you came to close. “Mathsy” she mumbled to herself.

“Ugh…I’m sorry?” Danni asked as she tilted her head.

“British too. Sounds like Midlands. Oxford I guess? Makes sense. Smart girl from a smart place” she mumbled further. It wasn’t too quiet to hear at all but sounded like she was undecided whether or not she wanted Danni to hear or not.

“W-What do you mean by †˜Mathsy’?” All of Danni’s confidence had seeped out of her at this point and anxiety took back over her, never mind the pinpoint accuracy of the girl’s deductions over Danni’s origins, the girl just had that weird effect of making the confidence leave people.

“Mathsy. You like maths, or are good at it anyway. I can smell the numeracy on you” she leaned in further and sniffed Danni’s brunette hair before Danni fell back onto her behind out of both confusion and fear over the eccentric girl’s actions. “Coconut. I thought so” her eyes lowered down slightly “White with blue stripes, frilly design to them. Cute and yet sexy too. The mark of someone who knows how to appeal to all preferences” Danni, initially unaware of what the girl was talking about realised her legs were a little too spread apart from the fall back onto her behind and realised she was talking about her panties. Danni grabbed her skirt and thrust it down to cover herself as she clamped her legs shut. Crimson descending over her face. The girl looked up and down Danni one more time “Can you move my glasses back up please?” Her stoic face asked and amidst the confusion of what was going on, Danni managed to reach out her index finger and slightly readjust the spectacles of the girl ahead of her. “Thank you” was all she responded with before returning to her work.

Danni decided that she had enough of twin tail’s house of crazy and walked off, slinking around the wall where the hall bent into another sideward direction “Oh my God this place is…freaking nuts…”


Danni tried to put the encounter out of her mind as best she could, not that it did any good. She had always heard that the most creative of artists had some kind of odd complex. Van Gough with cutting off his ear, Beethoven was practically death despite his genre of art requiring the sense of sound and Ponytail girl was…eccentric as they come. Still, something took her mind completely off of it all. Two large read doors made out of some kind of solid red velvet cushion was featured on a campus of black wall with †˜PRACTICE ROOM: ACTING’ Danni was intrigued and made her way over to the room and gently nudged the door open with her good shoulder to just peek inside. What was inside was a mostly empty room: Wooden flooring in the wide open space with a stage at the back of the room. Several people were peppered in throughout the room but close enough to the stage (or on it) so they could get a good luck at what was going on. Clearly they were rehearsing a play, with two girls taking centre stage.

One wore a black dress, witches hat and broom stick with green makeup on, either that or leprosy was the disease of the season. The other girl however totally took Danni by surprise. She was a blonde haired girl with her long hair draped over her back in a red overcoat that only royalty would were, with golden wool tassels over the shoulder of the coat, grey leather trousers (that helped express her curvy figure) that were tucked into mid-shin-high black boots. One hand held on a sheathed rapier by her side. She was gorgeous; drop-dead so. Danni soon realised who this prince-like girl was: Chloe. At first she didn’t notice but the sound of her voice, shiny hair and perfect rear was all it took to convince Danni.

“Chloe acts?” Danni wanted to get a closer peek just to make sure, but her being a clumsy girl caused her to trip through the door until she was completely through it, leaving them to creak loudly and slam shut, drawing the attention of the entire room who cast their confused and frustrated gaze over her.

Chloe turned to see the brunette with bent knees trying to decide if crying or running was the best solution, she lowered her eyebrows from surprise and then offered Danni a tender look before clapping her hands together “It’s all-right guys, she’s with me” Chloe offered and the crowd silently mumbled before reaffirming their attention away from her as Chloe dropped down from the stage and sauntered over to her lover. “Hey what’s up?” She asked nonchalantly, swaying her hips one way against her already tight trousers.
Trying to take her eyes off of those stunningly outlined legs, but whenever she moved to another area of Chloe’s body that masculine clothing just gave Danni ideas about how she wanted to caress every inch of Chloe’s body in that outfit. “I…um…wanted to…um…” Danni shook her head clear of such lustful thoughts and attempted to try and explain herself. “I was just exploring some of the school with my study time and…” Danni looked up slightly to the taller girl, who had obviously noticed her thoughts about the costume, smirking at the brunette. †˜Stupid sexy Chloe…stop teasing…’ Danni moaned inside of her head.

“And then you saw me like this and couldn’t help but wanting…” Chloe moved herself closer to Danni until only mere millimetres separated their lips “To get a better look right?” she slowly with the tips of her fingers brushed down the sides of Danni’s abdomen, receiving a small groan from Danni’s lips as they parted. “Maybe you’d like to…rehearse some lines with me?” said in a husky tone as she brought her palms and rested them on Danni’s shoulders, leaving Danni to bite down on her lip to try and stop her gasp of pain. Chloe’s smile turned into a very visible frown when Danni gasped, trying to figure out what her girlfriend’s problem was. She was about to open her mouth to ask Danni a question when the doors to the hall burst open.

Danni spun around to see the twin tail’s girl that she had only just had an awkward conversation with enter into the room, causing her to grimace slightly at the appearance of the girl.

“Miss President, I was wondering what you would want for the backdrop for the play this year?” the stoic girl said and turned her head to look at Danni. Her eyebrows darted up a little and then her eyes tracked down to the hem of Danni’s skirt, as if trying to stare a hole through it to reconfirm that Danni’s panties hadn’t changed. The foreigner grabbed said hem and tried pulling it down slightly out of embarrassment as Chloe stood there without a clue as to what the situation was between the two students.

“Danni, do you know Hannah at all?” Chloe asked as she folded her arms, taking an assertive stance with her lover. She knew everything about Danni’s school-life at the academy, so for her to not have known about a personal relationship was confusing for the blonde.

“Our relationship goes no further than the colour and styling of her panties” Hannah, the twin tails girl as known by Danni, said with the most deadpan face possible whilst Danni’s blush must have been visible from space.

Meanwhile Chloe stood in complete silence, a single-thick vein protruding from the top of her forehead as breathing momentarily stopped. “D-Danni…may I talk to you in the dressing room?” Chloe’s voice was quiet, uncomfortably so, like she was trying her very best to keep her anger from exploding in the form of her yelling. Which was even more emphasised by the way in which she clenched her fists until her knuckles went pure white.
Rather than let Chloe’s anger and patience be tested any further Danni simply nodded with the enthusiasm of fear motivating her to do so. Chloe took an overly-aggressive grip on her lovers hand and took long and quick strides with Danni in tow.


She barged the door open and lead Danni behind one of the costumes racks that would more or less completely conceal them from any third-party who happened to also wander into the room. She threw Danni against the wall and crashed her lips against the brunette, forcing her tongue inside her lover’s mouth and swirling it within, picking up the raw taste of Danni’s mouth. She gently relented to stroke Danni’s long brown locks and press a gentle kiss to her forehead.

“I’m going to be rough, but if it hurts too much just let me know…” Chloe said, no signs of her signature smile anywhere along her perfectly crafted face. As much as Danni wanted to let Chloe know that nothing obscene had occurred between her and Hannah she couldn’t fight the feeling growing between her legs ever since she first saw Chloe in that outfit. Explanations could wait.

By no means was Chloe usually aggressive, if anything she treated her lover like she was porcelain vase, always careful not to harm her. But recently their love life had been interrupted by the turn of the New Year, the both of them had obligations that they needed to attend to and neither of them had been able to find the time to spend with each-other. Whether it was Chloe keeping the student body in check or Danni looking after her younger siblings or studying for exams the two of them had been kept away from one-another. Hearing about Hannah seeing Danni’s underwear (even by accident, which Chloe assumed) had finally caused the final bit of restraint Chloe had forced upon herself to snap. Now her hands were roaming across the supple, milky flesh of her lover as she teased and bit along every inch of Danni’s body, making sure to drag her teeth agonisingly against the surface of the brunette’s ear.

“W-What if we get cau-Hya!” Danni’s sentence was ended by Chloe grabbing at her chest through her school-uniform and biting at her earlobe. She gently rolled her palm over Danni’s chest and worked Danni over to get her voice to the correct hitch that she loved to hear; somewhere between a gentle moan and purr. Eventually Danni’s breathing picked up at the warm and yet almost vicious and impatient grabbing and biting Chloe was using, she angled her hips slightly so she was resting on Chloe’s thigh and started dragging herself up and down her lover with speed and desire, craving her first orgasm quickly. All pain in her shoulder had faded into a distant whisper, barely occupying the same space as her anymore, pleasure acting as a suitable painkiller.

Chloe responded to Danni’s desire with a gentle nip at her chin and slap to her behind “Calm down. We’ll get you there…” at the sound of Chloe’s soothing and yet demanding voice Danni slowed her paced down and leant back into the wall. Chloe went back to kissing Danni, invading her mouth again and wrapping her tongue around Danni’s as she squeezed it and then retracted to bite Danni’s bottom lip. “I know you like it like this my love…” Chloe smirked into another kiss as Danni moaned some kind of response as they kissed, running her fingers through Chloe’s hair and twirling the golden locks in her hands.

Chloe released Danni from the kiss leaving her panting for air and giving off a low groan that could only be related to a child begging for a toy. Chloe gestured for Danni to raise her arms and she complied quickly as Chloe quickly lifted off her sweater vest and unbuttoned her shirt, not wasting the time to pull it off. Fortunately for the two of them Danni was wearing a bra that clipped around the front of her torso so not much time was spent on removing that article of clothing. The blonde took Danni’s bubble-gum pink nipples in between her fingers, gently pulling on them as she watched Danni’s face blush at the teasing. She rolled one over with her thumb before moving her tongue to lap at the nub while grabbing at the mound of flesh of her other breast. Danni’s breathing was now erratic, the small gleam of sweat coating her body had turned into a full wave of moisture, her entire body seeking release. Chloe stood up straight and pulled on tightly to her taut nipples, Danni moaning in a mixture of pain and pleasure so blurred she could barely tell where one began and the other ended.

“C-Chloe I need it…” Danni’s eyes were totally glazed with craving for Chloe, euphoria within touching distance and yet Chloe wouldn’t push her over the edge.

“Need what?” She grinned, not letting Danni get off until she was at the height of embarrassment. She had plenty more tortuous things in mind but that adorable face was very convincing.

“I love you…I need you…please!” Danni shut her eyes tightly out of mortification while her hands seeking out and grasping over the curvaceous area of Chloe’s butt. Chloe sneered and gave another tight squeeze to Danni’s breasts, eliciting another gentle squeak from the shorter girl’s lungs.

A small kiss was placed on Danni’s lips by Chloe “I love you too…” A devious idea came across Chloe’s mind, mixed with a genuine idea that she thought could aid her lover. “Okay…but on one condition. You see we need someone to play Snow White in the play the schools putting on, all you have to do is agree to play the role and I’ll let you cum” Chloe ran her fingers gently against Danni’s moist sex, refusing to end her torturous teasing until she got a †˜Yes’ out of Danni. †˜Maybe I can get her to open up to even more people…maybe it will help with her anxiety?’ It was a long shot and she expected Danni to outright refuse her, but the brunette grabbed Chloe’s hand in her own.

“Y-You’ll be beside me the whole time right?” Danni asked as she dipped her body down against Chloe’s fingers as they began pressing harder and faster.

“Of course”

Danni opened her eyes and looked Chloe dead in the eyes “I-If it’s with you…I’ll do anything!” Danni kissed Chloe as she started grinding herself against Chloe’s thigh again whilst her fingers were curled inside Danni and began rhythmically pumping in and out of her, the pleasure alone almost enough to knock her unconscious. Chloe started thrusting her fingers harder and faster, Danni moaning louder as her pussy began leaking juices down Chloe’s arm. Soon the feeling started causing Danni’s walls to clench down as the rush of her orgasm overtook her, biting into Chloe’s shoulder to stop her scream from being heard. Chloe gently peppered Danni’s face with kisses, rubbing her now soaked panties to help the girl ride out her orgasm slowly and to its fullest extent.


Eventually the two girls returned from the changing room, Chloe with her hair slightly de-shelved and her costume looked like it had been hastily placed on after being taken off for whatever reason. “Ladies and…more ladies…I present to you this year’s Snow White: Danni Wakeland-Ulistani!” Chloe raised the flushed girl’s hand, her eyes stuck to the floor below. Most of the actors stood aghast with only Hannah remaining stoic as ever.

“Eccentric. More than me. Weird. Don’t like it…” Hannah said as she gently frowned but then shrugged “White with blue is Snow White’s colours I guess…”
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Xenon FAKKU Writer
All caught up now. Those sure were some saucy chapters, I must say. Happy to hear that you might have some more free time to continue this as well. Always good to see more stuff from you. Thinking of submitting any more poetry?

Here were some noteworthy errors I thought I should point out:

“Maybe you’d like to…rehearsesome lines with me?”


There should be a space between those two words.

†˜Maybe I can get her top open up to even more people…maybe it will help with her anxiety?’


To.
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
Xenon wrote...
All caught up now. Those sure were some saucy chapters, I must say. Happy to hear that you might have some more free time to continue this as well. Always good to see more stuff from you. Thinking of submitting any more poetry?

Here were some noteworthy errors I thought I should point out:

“Maybe you’d like to…rehearsesome lines with me?”


There should be a space between those two words.

†˜Maybe I can get her top open up to even more people…maybe it will help with her anxiety?’


To.


Thanks for the corrections Xenon~ Yeah I thought I might do a poem in memory of the late Monty Oum (He was my inspiration for writing) and there is some other stuff I'm thinking of doing too.
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
I would have updated this something like two or three days ago but...procrastination of editing always hits me. Regardless here's two chapters for you guys. I'll post the second Chapter later.

Chapter 14: Family Reunion

Spoiler:
Danni stood up on stage in a dress befitted for only the most exotic of Princesses from the greatest of tales, the type of dress that every young girl aspired to own. It was tinted the most softest of blue with a white lining. An array of jewellery lined to her skirt that ended by her ankles as well as a silver tiara with an equally eccentric plethora of jewels inside of it too. The backdrop of a forest behind her and the wicked witch in front of her with a crimson red apple in hand, being somewhat forcefully gestured towards her.

The whole scene screamed tackiness.

“Oi, little girl, wouldn’t ya just love to eat from this †˜ere apple?” the obvious witch inquired of Snow White.

†˜Honestly what kinda stupidly dense pillock would fall for this? I mean come on! She’s got green skin, dressed like a stereotype and is offering a sole apple to you right after the dwarves, who were all taller than me anyway, told you not to talk or take anything from a stranger inside of this forest! It’s a testament to how Snow White deserved to sleep forever…I’d almost root for the Witch if she herself wasn’t an idiot for thinking this is the best way to go about getting revenge. A poisoned apple? Surely there’s some sort of law about restricting the usage of a †˜Forever-leaving-you-in-a-constant-state-of-sleep’ potion. †˜Cause if there is why doesn’t she just kill Snow White? And if there isn’t a law against it, why in the name of God would she chose this method? Is a coma-apple the only object capable of revenge that would let her get by on a technicality from being persecuted? And that seems like a pretty big oversight on the government’s part…

Danni internally criticised the plot of Snow White, not stopping to relent on her mockery of her own character’s stupidity as well as pointing out the inaccuracies of their own production of the play and its lack of originality, just retelling the original fairy-tale without any obvious deviations other than interactions †˜And the dialogue is horrible too! I bet even a five-year old would see it as simplistic and offensive to their intelligence…’ she continued, not realising that the whole hall had stopped expecting her to say her line before falling silent at her stoic expression and body language. “Oh! Umm…” Danni tried to refocus herself to figure out her line, it was something simple like: Oh, what a pretty apple all for me? But at the same time it was something different and offering an alternative line that hadn’t been agreed on by the screen-writer and director proved to invoke the wrath of the director herself.

The sound of paper being thrown onto the ground came from the centre of the audience as a girl with short ginger hair stood from a Hollywood-styled director’s seat and put her hands on her hips while her nostrils flared up “Are you completely useless W-Wakeland…Wuli? Ula?” She groaned loudly in frustration “Your name is vexing, truly, truly vexing!” She stormed around her chair, parting the sea of bodies that made up the crowd wherever she went. Her features were plain and simple, a dark tan colour to her body, her expression was naturally angry like she had constantly been given bad news her entire life and Danni was just another tally to add to that chart.

“It’s Wakeland-Ulistani” Danni said without means to cause offense and just generally be helpful, not that the director would ever take it in such a way.

“I don’t give a shit!” she put bluntly, causing the Danni to jerk at the scream. “All you are to me is a pawn! I decide the moves you make and all you need to do is fucking move! But apparently even moving is difficult for you! And learn to fucking project that whimper you call a voice!” she cursed and berated Danni for the tenth time in the last hour. “You’re not some kind playhouse doll that is fixed in an inhuman shape, move your body like you would in real life! You’re not a statue: Move!” She emphasised the last point by yelling louder than she previously had, shaking the whole room from her scream alone. “And your line, by the way, was †˜Oh what a delicious looking apple! I can have it?’ Don’t expect me to remember your Goddamn lines for you!” She picked up the script again and prepared to gesture for them to continue when the bell went to signal for the end of the day. “Fucking perfect! What a brilliant end to a shitty day, everyone get out!” she pinched the skin between her nose and sighed audibly to herself as everyone quickly made their way either out through the double doors or to the changing room so they could rapidly change and then make their way out.


Danni had swiftly made her way into the changing room to disrobe herself of the dress and jewellery before throwing on her own school uniform (minus her sweater vest), shouldered her bag and looked in the mirror to make sure her hair was properly in place. The last time she left the changing room with unkempt hair people had assumed (correctly) that she and Chloe had sex in there and she was not willing to be mortified like that again.
As Danni sorted through her bag to make sure all of her possession were in place and hadn’t fallen out, she felt the softest of tingling sensations run down her back causing her to yelp and jump up and around to face the culprit. Of course it was none other than her lover and master criminal when it came to robbing her of her dignity and replacing it with embarrassment and hickies: Chloe Jean.

“Hey cutie,” She greeted with a chuckle and wink before pecking Danni on the cheek. “I think you did really well today.”

“Were you watching a different play than me? I did not exactly light the world on fire…” Danni sulked and turned away from Chloe.

“Okay, yep, you probably made Hitchcock, Chaplin and many other famous thespians roll over in their graves I’ll admit…” Chloe responded with light-hearted mockery.

“Well thank you for the vote of confidence…” Danni puffed out her cheeks and folded her arms, only to have Chloe’s wrap around her waist and over them. Chloe rested her chin on Danni’s shoulder and nuzzled into the crevice of her neck.

“You Brits, so cynical” Chloe shrugged smiling.

“Other than the casual racism do you have a point you’re trying to make?” She received a light bop on the head for that remark.

“Calme Mon amour, you really do like to get finished before we begin don’t you?” A cheap joke if any could be made, a small innuendo aimed at Danni to which she rolled her eyes at. “Your acting may-” as if there was any doubt to be had “not have been world class, I will admit. But you barely stammered at all except for right at the end there.” Chloe spun Danni and softly stroked her hands along the sides of Danni’s head and finished by cupping her face “You’re doing fine my love, I love you for trying so hard at something so difficult” she pressed their heads together and smiled, not a smirk to tease Danni, but a smile of love and compassion.

Danni’s eyes darted down as they always did in this situation, being praised was
difficult for her to deal with mostly due to being taught that being vain was so bad she would get embarrassed as a self-defence mechanism so she wouldn’t act vain “R-Really? I-I don’t think I was that good…” her blush grew in size the longer she spoke.

“No need to be modest my love, you did just fine” Chloe took her hand and began leading her out of the changing room.

Danni really loved Chloe. Really-really loved Chloe, she was kind, considerate and never accepted that someone could reach their limit. She always pushed Danni just that little bit further than she felt comfortable all in order to try and help Danni and it always worked for better or worse. They helped each-other with their problems and trusted one-another with everything. Gentle and requited was every feeling between the two of them and a small smile streaked across Danni’s face as she looked at Chloe’s back, her strong and soft hand wrapping around her own.

†˜Pure bliss’ she mumbled to herself in her own mind and a soft sigh of happiness escaped her own lips. It may not have been the most exciting of relationships or even the most dramatic, if anything it was the group as a whole that brought out the most drama so far since she came to the academy, but it was the perfect relationship for her.

It was right then that a small beeping came from the depths of Danni’s bag, a small inclination of surprise appearing on her face in the form of parted lips and raised eyebrows. She stopped and remorsefully drew her hand away from Chloe’s as they both stopped in their tracks in the middle of the hall. She unzipped her bag and sifted through the items in her bag until a moderately bright light flashed from atop her sweater vest. She picked out her phone to see †˜Receiving call from: Home’ on the screen of her IPhone. She unlocked it and answered the device.

“This is Danielle speaking?” unassured in her own answer she scrunched her own face, making Chloe giggle quietly, she was never good at answering the phone.

“Ah, Miss Wakeland- No. I’m sorry I forgot your demands Miss.” The upper-class voice said apologetically. It was Charles, the servant of Danni’s house, unmistakeable. “Miss Danielle I have been told to inform you that your aunt and her children will be making their way over to the estate for dinner and will be staying for a week. Your Father is on his way to pick you up now” he finished and waited for Danni’s confirmation that she understood the news she had just been given. Though for a few moments she stood in shaking frustration, biting down onto her lip until the smallest drop of blood surfaced.

“Yes” she said weakly “I understand. Please tell Father I shall be waiting in the car park” she hung up right there and dropped her phone into her bag and exhaled a shaky breath. Before losing her balance Chloe caught her in a tight hold and gently stroked her head.

“What’s up?” she asked neutrally with an inquisitive stare, though Danni couldn’t see Chloe’s expression from burying her face in the blonde’s shoulder.

“The most stuck up, judgemental and egocentric woman in the world is staying in my house for the week. The woman who likes to break people’s confidence in themselves for fun” Danni said her voice a mixture of frustration and sorrow.

Chloe patted the top of her girlfriend’s head and rubbed her back in order to try and quell the anger growing inside her “I won’t ask about what she’s done. But do you want me to come with you?” Danni looked up with absolute wonder in her eyes.

“You would do that…for me?” any tears in her eyes simply faded and a smile too their place.

“Course I would, why wouldn’t I be there for the girl I love?” Chloe tried (and failed) to stifle her giggle.

“You’re too amazing…” Danni gently run the tip of index finger up and down Chloe’s toned bicep as she rested her face against her lover’s chest. “But I think her knowing I’m gay would give her too much ammunition to use against me” Danni sighed in defeat again, even if Chloe did come and help sway the tide that was her aunt’s criticism’s she couldn’t be there for Danni 24/7.

“Do your parents’ know yet?” Chloe enquired calmly but Danni only continued to timidly run her finger up and down Chloe’s arm “Right, one conversation at a time” Chloe could tell this was a topic Danni wasn’t confident in bringing up and decided to move that conversation down the list of things to worry about, right now all that mattered was trying to comfort her Danni.


Chloe took Danni by the hand again and brought her to the car park by the front of the school where at the back of the zone was Danni’s Father leant up against the side of his Aston Martin with dark shades on over his eyes and his phone in hand whilst being perfectly dressed for a meeting. Chloe had only seen the man a few times since she met Danni, but the man did look pretty cool and had a surprisingly carefree attitude to the world around him despite his demanding job. She would have expected most executives to be grumpy alcoholics who had been divorced three or four times. An exception to every rule it seemed, or more than likely she had given in to a stereotype. She took her hand away from Danni’s and turned the girl towards her before placing her hands on Danni’s shoulder.

“I’ll see you Monday. Do me and yourself proud my love” Chloe winked and took a step away as Danni did everything in her power to control her urge to kiss Chloe with her father watching from across the car park. She gave a quick nod, turned on her heels and walked quickly towards her Father.


Danni stared down at her bag by her feet as her Father chose to drove much slower than her usually did, probably to try and avoid seeing his sister by as long as possible. From the harsh stare Danni gave her bag one would think she was trying to get it to set alight. Or explode. Danni wasn’t too picky, either power would be quite useful for dismantling her aunt. As morbid of a thought as that was Danni thought it would be a just punishment for a women like her aunt.

“You’ve been pretty quiet Danielle” Karim stated as he stopped for traffic, tapping his steering wheel as a result of his OCD much like Danni tapped the underside of her glasses due to her own. Heck if they timed it right they could create a new brand of music.

“Just thinking. She’s staying with us” Danni said spitting fire at the mention of her aunt. Not to mention her aunt’s daughter Emily would be there, she was exactly like her Mother through Danni’s eyes: Pure evil. When she was young she would lie to get others in trouble, when she was Danni’s age she would sleep around with multiple boys without any guilt (telling them she truly cared for them) and would humiliate them afterwards. Though her aunt had another child called Stephen, he was the polar opposite to his sister and Mother as he was caring, generous and always looked after Danni like they were siblings rather than cousins. Not to forget he was drop-dead gorgeous. Danni looked forward a little to seeing him at least.

“Respect young lady!” Karim demanded and Danni flinched in fear “No matter what you feel she’s still your family and elder”

“Yes Father…” Danni said dryly and earned herself a glare until the traffic started up again and Karim relented.

“It’s only for a week. Then you won’t see her for a long while I’m sure” Karim tried to make Danni feel better but the young girl just rolled her eyes, a trait she borrowed from Blake.

“That’s a week of her criticising everything we’ve done! Every choice we’ve made! Doesn’t that get annoying? Aren’t you fed up with her?!” Danni yelled, expecting herself to be reprimanded again. All she received was a painful silence from her father as he let out a long breath more from exasperation than anything.

“More than you know. Growing up with her was a pure Hell. I’m not a religious man by any stretch of the imagination, but every night before we went to bed I would pray to Allah to take her away or through her into a flaming volcano” That brought a small chuckle from Danni “Your grandfather told me how that was against some kind of tenant to wish death upon your own flesh and blood so easily so I got grounded for it” a slight twitch manifested above Karim’s eye.

“Seems pretty accurate that she would get away with being a nuisance and someone else would suffer…” Danni replied and Karim nodded.

“Just how life is sometimes. The good get punished and the wicked continue being wicked” that reminded Danni of the wicked witch from Snow White and she decided to bring it up as a change of topic in an attempt to brighten the mood before they had to incur the storm that was to come.

“You know I’ve been cast in the school play for Snow White as Snow White herself?” Danni smiled and Karim almost let his grip on the steering wheel loose from his astonishment.

“Seriously? That’s amazing kiddo!” he carefully patted her head without removing his eyes from the road. “I never imagined you’d audition for a play!” a bright smile coated his face.

“Well…I got talked into it by my friend…” Danni admitted with a nervous glee as she thought of Chloe, a light tint of pink on her cheeks.

“I’m proud of you regardless. When’s the date for the first performance?” Karim asked looking like a schoolboy with his level of excitement.

“The 27th” Danni said with a calm confidence she had never known before. Whether it was simply Chloe’s gentle words of encouragement or due to being on stage in front of a crowd she was finally able apply a level of bravery that had previously seemed foreign to her.

“I’ll put it in my diary” Karim nodded.


And then they pulled up to the driveway of their home, with a different car parked outside of their house. However, it was all too familiar who it belonged to: Cinder Ulistani, Danni’s aunt.
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Xenon FAKKU Writer
Great to see the next chapter and looking forward to the next. Unfortunately for you I spotted a lot of errors this time.

DatYuriThough wrote...
Danni stood up on stage in a dress befitted for only the most exotic of Princess’ from the greatest of tales, the type of dress that every young girl aspired to own. It was tinted the most softest of blue with a white lining and sleeve of it.


"Princess'" shouldn't have an apostrophe, it should be "princesses." Also, "sleeve of it." Should that be "sleeve off it?"

DatYuriThough wrote...
“I don’t give a shit!” she put bluntly, causing the Danni to jerk at the cream


Scream, I believe you meant.

DatYuriThough wrote...
She picked out her phone to see †˜Receiving call from: Home’ on the screen of her IPhone


I believe it should be spelled as "iPhone" since that it the appropriate trademarked title that the company has settled on. Not a big error, but so you know.

DatYuriThough wrote...
It was Charles, the servant of Danni’s house, unmistakeable.


It's spelled "unmistakable," though it should probably be "unmistakably" in that instance.

DatYuriThough wrote...
“Yes” she said weakly “I understand.


Comma after "Yes" to signify a break in the quotation.

DatYuriThough wrote...
“Hey cutie” She greeted with a chuckle and wink before pecking Danni on the cheek. “I think you did really well today”


Comma after "Hey." Period needed at the end of the sentence.

DatYuriThough wrote...
“The most stuck up, judgemental and egocentric woman in the world is staying in my house for the week. The woman who likes to break people’s confidence in themselves for fun” Danni said her voice a mixture of frustration and sorrow.


It's spelled judgmental, so drop the 'e.' A comma is needed at the end of the quotation. Also, probably a comma after "Danni said."

DatYuriThough wrote...
“Do your parents’ know yet?” Chloe enquired calmly but Danni only continued to timidly run her finger up and down Chloe’s arm “Right, one conversation at a time” Chloe could tell this was a topic Danni wasn’t confident in bringing up and decided to move that conversation down the list of things to worry about, right now all that mattered was trying to comfort her Danni.


The word "parents" does not need an apostrophe at the end. Enquired is spelled with an 'i,' so it's inquired. A period should be after "arm." The comma after "about" is a comma splice so it should just be a period and consequently the 'r' in "right" should be capitalized.

DatYuriThough wrote...
“I’ll see you Monday. Do me and yourself proud my love”


A comma is needed after "proud" and at the end of that quotation after "love."

DatYuriThough wrote...
“You’ve been pretty quiet Danielle”


Commas are needed both after "quiet" and also "Danielle."

DatYuriThough wrote...
Danni wasn’t too picky, either power would be quite useful for dismantling her aunt. As morbid of a thought as that was Danni thought it would be a just punishment for a women like her aunt.


The comma after "picky" is a comma splice and should be a semicolon since it's separating two complete sentences. A comma is needed after "was." Also, "women" should be "woman."

DatYuriThough wrote...
“Respect young lady!” Karim demanded and Danni flinched in fear “No matter what you feel she’s still your family and elder”


A missing comma after "Respect" and "fear," lowercase "No" because it's the second quotation in the same sentence, also the end of the sentence needs a period.

DatYuriThough wrote...
“Yes Father…” Danni said dryly and earned herself a glare until the traffic started up again and Karim relented.


Comma after "Yes."

DatYuriThough wrote...
“It’s only for a week. Then you won’t see her for a long while I’m sure”


Commas needed after "while" and "sure."

DatYuriThough wrote...
“More than you know. Growing up with her was a pure Hell. I’m not a religious man by any stretch of the imagination, but every night before we went to bed I would pray to Allah to take her away or through her into a flaming volcano” That brought a small chuckle from Danni “Your grandfather told me how that was against some kind of tenant to wish death upon your own flesh and blood so easily so I got grounded for it” a slight twitch manifested above Karim’s eye.


Commas needed after "volcano," "Danni," and "grounded for it."

DatYuriThough wrote...
“Just how life is sometimes. The good get punished and the wicked continue being wicked”


Comma needed after "wicked."

DatYuriThough wrote...
“The 27th” Danni said with a calm confidence she had never known before.


Comma needed after "27th."

DatYuriThough wrote...
“I’ll put it in my diary” Karim nodded.


Comma needed after "diary." By the way, this is looking almost consistent. Is this allowed in the Queen's English or something? I was unaware.

DatYuriThough wrote...
And then they pulled up to the driveway of their home, with a different car parked outside of their house. However, it was all too familiar who it belonged to: Cinder Ulistani, Danni’s aunt.


I would not begin this sentence with "And" and even "then" after is not necessary at all.
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DatYuriThough Goddess of Nature
Xenon wrote...
Great to see the next chapter and looking forward to the next. Unfortunately for you I spotted a lot of errors this time.

By the way, this is looking almost consistent. Is this allowed in the Queen's English or something? I was unaware.


Thanks for going to all that work. I don't know if it's consistent with other works in Queen's English but it's certainly my style to do so. I've done it for every other chapter so I'm kinda surprised you haven't noticed before. It's just a stylised choice really.
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Xenon FAKKU Writer
DatYuriThough wrote...
Thanks for going to all that work. I don't know if it's consistent with other works in Queen's English but it's certainly my style to do so. I've done it for every other chapter so I'm kinda surprised you haven't noticed before. It's just a stylised choice really.


I'm sort of surprised I didn't notice it as well. I was aware that in Queen's English, punctuation can go outside of the quotation "like so". However, if it's your style, then I suppose just ignore my comments above on it.
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