mibuchiha Posts

Well, for all the shit talk I did, I am quite looking forward to your sex chapter. While your work is too short and as far as you've posted contains not much substance, your writing is quite good. The language is better than mine (don't get proud, I'm not much of an opponent) and overall the work is quite smooth. Which means, with enough eroticism, your sex chapter should be a good read.

Just be careful about the numbers and your wording. Try to make it simple and minimize "in-speaking". For example, I have no idea what 'do 160' means. Oh, and the caps. Save that for things that need it. "Mirage" is a specific term for the story or just a word? If it's the latter, then it should be mirage.

As for readability, it's really just about the spacing.

https://www.fakku.net/viewtopic.php?t=89691

>quintuple posts
>tells others not to double post

Lolk.

No, really. I don't know what's the deal as I don't think multiple posting, as long as it isn't excessive, is a problem. But that's not very nice of you.

Doing fine so far. Being nervous as hell and slowly getting back the motivation to write.

And no, I don't think I'm disrespecting him. I was just irritated with what he gave us since I expected quite a bit after his "IT WILL BE EPIC".

Enough banter, how's life treating you?

Read it. Shit's not even a story you know.

A shit writer here actually puts more in between two ***'s than his 3 chapters combined.

...what.



Active pretty much means I lack other things to do, not really respectable lol.



Admittedly it was simply hunch, but he just proved it by posting his bits. How his earlier description was all about the characters and not the characterization, almost nothing on the setting and flow etc etc. I could go on but I'd rather not this post be a "here's the reason you suck" post so I'll stop.

Oh for Avant, I think you might want to do more with each chapter. How do you do that is up to you, as this is your story, but the chapters really do need to contain more story in them.

And the posts should be more readable too.

REMEMBER TO PLAY ALONG WHEN THIS THREAD GETS TO 547.

No Clannad. You're missing out.

Ahaha, that would definitely be nice. I would like to visit Japan someday too.

But well, first I need to be rich. My reason to want to visit Japan is the food.

Haha I suppose that's true. Me and nanapyon are different in just the right way that we happen to stick together. Like quarks inside a hadron, see. Same as other friends I happen to have.

Ooh. How long will he live there? Japan eh, I heard it's not very nice to foreigners.

really? i was under the impression that only a few friends visit mine.

which can be said for yours too, but you seem to have more of those.

Well I do think it is.

Which is what I try to make this thread into, without much success. As much as I want it to contain "everything", it ends up being filled with my 'color' for the most part.

It doesn't help that my color is a very dull one.

MY=SAVIOR/.

It's to show this is a dump everything section.

long time no see

Actually it's faith that needs rejecting, not the existence of god.

If god does exist and the existence is provable beyond doubt, then one would be wrong to reject it. But faith is wrong because it refuses to accept any proof contrary to itself and insists on belief to be the measure of truth.

I guess so. Now I'm just nervous, my apps result should be out soon.

Uh huh, and rose has to do with what in this?

And no, well, this is my normal actually. Serious... not yet.

Explain. I don't think I understand.

On the evil quotes thread:

I don't see what's so evil about the quotes. Some are funny posts, the rest is just another fact. Most of them. Evil? No.

Hey come on. He's that confident that IT WILL BE EPIC. Give the dude a chance to prove himself.

Speaking of which, a mediocre writer here thinks your work will probably suck if that's how you describe it.