Being Hunted

[I've never written a story in my life, so...this is gonna suck. Just sayin.]

[Edit: It has been suggested via pm that I make a quick note here that this is a femdom story, all those turned off by aggressive females, this won't be for you. All those not, try to enjoy. Also, the female in question is not human. Not a beast either, more a cross between what a shark and a woman would look like, ideally. Curvaceous body, ribbed ridges instead of eyebrows, and portrusions on her back...Just a warning is all >.>]

At least 3 days had gone by without any sleep when Joseph found a small, out of the way motel on the side of the road. If he didn't stop now, he'd be too tired to keep running. Joseph pulled over to the side of the road and sighed, reflecting on what he had been going through.

It had been three months since the discovery of the Fae creatures. The Fae exemplified all of the myths associated with them: Beautiful, powerful, though fiercely territorial, and unkind to those viewed as 'lesser races'. The Fae were immortal, and up till now had intended to leave the human race to destroy itself. When they were discovered, they came out publicly and informed everyone of a peaceful plan to coexist with humanity, but wishing not to be pulled into the politics.

Humans around the world quickly agreed to this, not knowing much about the Fae, but knowing for certain that they were not to be trifled with, in the very least. However some of these Fae creatures weren't satisfied with this simple coexistence. Some desired a bit more, and this would be why Joseph was running now.

Since their coming out to the world, the Fae have in general viewed the human race as inferior, yet interesting. The same way a human might view a dog, the Fae viewed humans. Some Fae desired a human of their own, to be a bond servant. Among the Fae an agreement was reached. They could only take a human to be a bond servant if that human followed them willingly. As a result, individual Fae will take part in 'hunts'.

A Fae will choose a human, usually one they've scouted for months on end to be sure it's the one they wanted. They will then approach this human with their offer. Some humans accept, though most say no. Fae have a nasty habit of choosing humans with families, or those with ambition that don't desire servitude. Afterwards a Fae will do everything legally within their power to 'convince' the human to follow them. This can include sabotaging their job using subtle, indirect means, causing their families to leave them using similar methods, or, as is the case with Joseph now, will hunt them, seduce them, and convince them to lay with them.

Joseph shook his head, the Fae that was hunting him was rather persistent, though he had no idea if this was common among Fae or if he was just unlucky. He doesn't want to be a bond servant, not to a Fae, not to anyone. Joseph had dreams, aspirations, wants and desires, none of which could happen if he was bonded. He had been running from the Fae that chose him, though she has caught up with him several times already. He was beginning to think that once chosen, there WAS no escape for a human, as running from a Fae, a creature of magic, that could bend the laws of reality to their whim, was beginning to prove rather futile.

Joseph got out of his car and walked over to the entrance to the motel lobby. The person behind the desk smiled as he looked up, "Well hello there mister. What can I do ya fer?" Joseph shook his head and mumbled something akin to the words "I need sleep." the man behind the desk nodded and gave Joseph a set of keys, charging him for them and telling him to have a wonderful night's sleep. Joseph mumbled his thanks as he looked at the room number on his keys.

He made his way to the second floor of the motel and found his room, "204." he whispered to himself as he looked at the numbers on front of the door. He unlocked the door and stepped in, only to heart sink as he viewed the inside. The Fae that had been chasing him was sitting on his bed, smiling at him with a knowing look, "It took you long enough, my love..." she said.

Joseph knew he couldn't escape, not now. He needed rest. He'd just need to endure her for now. However she wasn't making it easy for him. The Fae's name was Claudisia, though Joseph preferred not to know this. The less he could think of her as an individual, and just another Fae creature, the easier it was to resist her. She was dressed in simple garb: jeans, a white t-shirt, and sandals. When she stood up from his bed, she flipped her long dark hair from under her shirt and let it tumble out from all sides as she walked over to him, "...Miss me?" she whispered, her voice low, raspy, and dripping with what sounded like hunger and lust mixed together.

[I'll post Part 2 tomorrow]

i didn't think it was that bad really~
i feel like it may have been missing some juicy details; since you're making a fantasy, you have to "create" it, ya know? but it's not like you missed anything, there's nothing that couldn't be covered later on, questions will always arise when there's fictional material like this anyways...

it's definitely good enough that i am very much looking forward to part 2, and even a little bit aroused~
do as you please~

I've heard a lot of bullshit in my life, so I've gotten pretty good at knowing it when I see it.

It's very good, but I have to know what inspired you to write this? Long nights at the gas station I suppose? I'm really torn; on the one hand I want Joseph to break out of his daze and bash her with the crowbar, and make his escape. On the other hand, for the moment she doesn't seem so bad. Though I've only seen her mannerisms when being fucked senseless, and so can't really form a solid opinion yet.

Well, for one I'm a HUGE femdom fan.

For 2, I've been playing Kingdoms of Amalur, which was made and written by the same fellas that came up wityh Drizzt Do'Urden(Nerd moment). Fae are interesting creatures to me, and I've always been interested in hypothesizing what it might be like if they actually existed.

Especially since, in a Lovecraftian kind of way, they're superior to humans in just about every way, and are more than aware of it. Regularly they're referenced as seeing humans more as pets and animals than as co existeing sentient creatures. You'll see what happens in the conclusion. IF I get inspired to make a continuation of the story, I might. Though more likely if I do intend to write another one in this setting, it'll be about different people.

Great game so far. Wish I had more time to play, but there is a lot to do. I'm going for a half finesse/half sorcery kind of dude. So, I understand your story more than someone who hasn't played it or checked up on the lore. Suffice to say, this is a very intriguing story that I am quite interested in reading the conclusion of.

+ rep to you.
You should write more.
I thoroughly enjoyed this story! I could understand Josephs pain of being tortured, mainly through his actions. You also did a wonderful job describing Claudisia, making us understand the beast she is, the beauty of this faerie, the selfish passion she has.

Great work!

A little to sadistic during the sex I think, not a big fan of inducing a lot of pain during sex. It was still a fantastic story. You definitely described her feelings at the end very well, especially the little bit about faeire gifts.

Thanks guys. I'm glad to see my first story's such a success. I should write these more often if they're going to get me so much rep per post xD.

I understand the pain part can turn some people off, and I apologize if it did, I'll try to downplay it a bit if I write more.

Will you be an author who writes for an audience or have an audience because of how you write? I prefer you to be the latter.

And the part in the note at the very beginning about how it was going to suck...Bullshit

Nonsense, I think it added to the intrigue of the story. True, practically crushing his penis and cutting him to ribbons turned me off sexually. But as a writer I thought it fit the story perfectly, as it emphasized how inhuman she was and how strong they are compared to us humans. I think the message would have been lost if you'd downplayed it.

So sexually, I thought it was too much

Artistically, it was fantastic. And as much as I love a good smut, the actual sex scenes are really only a small part of it. The majority of it is the delivery, the emotions and physical feelings at the time. We all knew that Claudisia was going to be sadistic from the beginning, you set her up that way. The sex served to cement it, and doing it any differently would have actually changed the character. I'm glad you kept her that way.

Edit: I accidentally +repped Xenon and not you, I'll fix that when my time limit is done with.

I thought that was him +repping my post, so I evened it out and +repped him. Guess I'll have to +rep your's now.

I don't think that's really necessary. So Lundi, are you gonna write another story soon?

I dunno about SOON. The only reason I was even able to pump this one out was that I had inspiration. I don't even know where I'd start if I wanted to write a new one. Granted I could use this setting, but to be honest other than the specific characters of Joseph and Claudisia, I have very little of the actual objective setting lain out in my head. xD

Also, fair point concerning where I decide to go with my stories(violent vs nonviolent). I likely won't ever get rid of the violence completely, though I don't see a great reason to keep it up where it currently is, unless the person committing the violence(like Claudisia) is specifically characterized as someone who WOULD do such things.

I am a connoisseur of erotic/ fantasy related things. I must say, you have got something here. Write more out, make it into a doujin, or publish it into a book. Hell, I'll even buy it. You have talent.

If a doujin artist wanted to make it into one...I'd be fucking honored. Until then though, I'm still very much an amateur.

the painful sex was kind of... well, poor guy~
you really brought out the feeling the instinctive desire for sex combined with the mind's attempt to put a stop to it, it really brought me as a reader into the scene.

-by generic hentai plot what would proceed is the guy is too good at sex and she can't get enough of him~ (?) lol.

-i generally prefer things that are vanilla-ey, but your writing was absolutely fantastic~ better to write what you want to write~

I have deleted some postings of the story here. It's been brought to my attention that, aside from minor details, and the beginning part, my story is pretty much the exact same as this one

I'm wholly embarassed, and I'll be rewriting the story to make it a lot less similar in the coming days. It hadn't dawned on me until someone sent me the link and showed it to me, I must have read it at a far earlier date and had it pop back into my head, hence my 'inspiration' remarks.

Similar? There are parts that were exactly the same...same capital letters to moaning, same descriptions. You can't rewrite some of that stuff by memory.

Academia isn't the only place plagiarism is frowned upon and your reputation becomes less credible when these situations arise. I hope you take that to heart.

I understand, and I can only hope that you give me one more shot before writing me off. I promise not to disappoint with my re write, and can only help that my honesty about my mistakes will count for anything.