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mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Second round: I claim Clarisse McClellan from Farenheit 451.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Sure.
The wins were nice, but we're still midtable. And that is depressing.
The wins were nice, but we're still midtable. And that is depressing.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Lol Shane. Why do you care?
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Thanks for the feedback. I never even heard of Norwegian Wood so I can't comment on that... but glad you liked it. But anyway...
...wut. I don't remember you doing anything (to me at least) that made the apology necessary.
high_time wrote...
last but not least, sorry for the things happening before when I'm just merely acting immature and let my emotions take over me. ...wut. I don't remember you doing anything (to me at least) that made the apology necessary.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Rare visitor detected. May I help you somehow?
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
I forgot what made me came across this side (I believe it was a page on Tesla) but several entries in, insta bookmarked. What a read.
http://www.badassoftheweek.com/index.cgi?archive=1
http://www.badassoftheweek.com/index.cgi?archive=1
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Death is the same at any time.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
I have nothing against suicide, the life is yours to live, so of course, it is yours to die as well.
But why? Remember there is no reload button.
But why? Remember there is no reload button.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Yet you seem content with this farce?
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Has not gotten bored.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
@d:
Haha yeah. Maybe you can say more after it's over.
@leo:
Well, not quite but I guess that's close enough. It was not her that he had a problem with, it's himself.
And it does not have much to do with the loss of freedom either. "It's pleasant, but this is not what I want" kind of emotion... I'm not sure if that conveys the point well.
Because this follows the viewpoint of Tarou and sex was pretty low on the list of things he finds memorable.
That is something I leave to the judgment of the readers.
I'm aware, but I don't know any other word that fits the meaning better... lemme do some search.Holy fuck ore wa aho daaaa...
Haha yeah. Maybe you can say more after it's over.
@leo:
Well, not quite but I guess that's close enough. It was not her that he had a problem with, it's himself.
And it does not have much to do with the loss of freedom either. "It's pleasant, but this is not what I want" kind of emotion... I'm not sure if that conveys the point well.
Because this follows the viewpoint of Tarou and sex was pretty low on the list of things he finds memorable.
That is something I leave to the judgment of the readers.
I'm aware, but I don't know any other word that fits the meaning better... lemme do some search.Holy fuck ore wa aho daaaa...
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
I don't find it particularly funny. But anyway...
No comments on the grammar, I couldn't notice any mistakes.
Language was okay, except the erotic story part. Too many 'so to speak' seemingly without good reason.
As for what is this about, I guess it's just you taking a dictionary entry and then elaborating your thoughts on them... and yes, I don't find 'relatively' to be any kind of special words. Most of the time, in arguments especially, I found it to be a hint of laziness/stupidity. Not to mention that in your entry, you used words that I think is much grander than 'relatively' could ever be.
And again, as usual with your works, I found it to be whiny. And a lot of the jump in reasoning seem absurd to me. Like how the association with Margaret Thatcher is suddenly made.
No comments on the grammar, I couldn't notice any mistakes.
Language was okay, except the erotic story part. Too many 'so to speak' seemingly without good reason.
As for what is this about, I guess it's just you taking a dictionary entry and then elaborating your thoughts on them... and yes, I don't find 'relatively' to be any kind of special words. Most of the time, in arguments especially, I found it to be a hint of laziness/stupidity. Not to mention that in your entry, you used words that I think is much grander than 'relatively' could ever be.
And again, as usual with your works, I found it to be whiny. And a lot of the jump in reasoning seem absurd to me. Like how the association with Margaret Thatcher is suddenly made.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Thanks for the responses. Holy fuck I didn't know how to spell Celsius.
@leo:
I actually prefer the current title. This was intended to be an internal monologue in its entirety, save for the "..." parts, where words were actually spoken. So Tarou was not trying to explain how he felt, but instead it was more like us taking a peek as he experienced things.
I did not explain much about the job/past etc because I did not think it relevant to the main story but all characters are graduate students.
Because it was anticlimatic. Tarou was inexperienced. All he knew about the act was not from direct experience. So he believed (or at least, wanted to believe) that it was really as great as people make it out to be and was excited to find out about it himself. Which he did... but he found it to be very underwhelming. While he admitted that it felt good to him, there was more disappointment in him due to him being disillusioned.
Similarly, the case of relationships. Guilt was not what he felt. He approached the thing with the general preconception that hug is this magical thing that automatically establishes some sort of connection between people, that the warmth will melt any heart etc... but when he tried it himself, that was not the case. "Sure, it was warm..." he would say, but one can imagine him adding immediately, "but that's about it. There's nothing special." He decided that if he was to feel no connection anyway, that he would feel as isolated as ever, he would be better off single. The way he saw it, being in a relationship is all the hassles without the pleasures. And that was with someone he liked, mind you. He still liked her, but as things were, he liked being alone more.
On the suggested changes:
1- Duh I'm so stupid. Corrected.
2-
3- Yup, accepted all these.
4-
5- While you're right, it felt less Tarou-like so I don't accept this.
@Livided
Can you provide some examples of the flow problem?
@leo:
I actually prefer the current title. This was intended to be an internal monologue in its entirety, save for the "..." parts, where words were actually spoken. So Tarou was not trying to explain how he felt, but instead it was more like us taking a peek as he experienced things.
I did not explain much about the job/past etc because I did not think it relevant to the main story but all characters are graduate students.
Because it was anticlimatic. Tarou was inexperienced. All he knew about the act was not from direct experience. So he believed (or at least, wanted to believe) that it was really as great as people make it out to be and was excited to find out about it himself. Which he did... but he found it to be very underwhelming. While he admitted that it felt good to him, there was more disappointment in him due to him being disillusioned.
Similarly, the case of relationships. Guilt was not what he felt. He approached the thing with the general preconception that hug is this magical thing that automatically establishes some sort of connection between people, that the warmth will melt any heart etc... but when he tried it himself, that was not the case. "Sure, it was warm..." he would say, but one can imagine him adding immediately, "but that's about it. There's nothing special." He decided that if he was to feel no connection anyway, that he would feel as isolated as ever, he would be better off single. The way he saw it, being in a relationship is all the hassles without the pleasures. And that was with someone he liked, mind you. He still liked her, but as things were, he liked being alone more.
On the suggested changes:
1- Duh I'm so stupid. Corrected.
2-
3- Yup, accepted all these.
4-
5- While you're right, it felt less Tarou-like so I don't accept this.
@Livided
Can you provide some examples of the flow problem?
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Now that sounds like something to look forward to.
And I find it funny how different our approach to updating is. I just wing it fresh outta the press and you have all this prep.
And I find it funny how different our approach to updating is. I just wing it fresh outta the press and you have all this prep.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
I have no damn idea what I just read. No, I got the 'plot', but yeah, that was random.
Definitely one of your worse works. :v
Now, time for something less alcoholic (lies, I am drinking as this is typed).
I won't bother about the grammar, it looked ok to me. And while some parts were queer, you were trying to emulate the chatting language so it was supposed to be that way.
About the characters... I found them very underwhelming and vapid. I can't really say why, but they're really lacking in some sense. And even if you said they are scientists, I can't quite see it in them...
Plot/Flow, no comment. As I said, pure randomness was the only impression I had. I guess it was never intended as any kind of story, just a snippet of the daily life of some people.
Definitely one of your worse works. :v
Now, time for something less alcoholic (lies, I am drinking as this is typed).
I won't bother about the grammar, it looked ok to me. And while some parts were queer, you were trying to emulate the chatting language so it was supposed to be that way.
About the characters... I found them very underwhelming and vapid. I can't really say why, but they're really lacking in some sense. And even if you said they are scientists, I can't quite see it in them...
Plot/Flow, no comment. As I said, pure randomness was the only impression I had. I guess it was never intended as any kind of story, just a snippet of the daily life of some people.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
I'm sort of in.
https://www.fakku.net/forums/writing-and-fanfiction/winter-contest-entry-2013-an-expository-of-the-mind
https://www.fakku.net/forums/writing-and-fanfiction/winter-contest-entry-2013-an-expository-of-the-mind
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Quickly composed over two hours and beer. Been two months since I did any writing and I'm impatient to dish something out (and Kierre 14 will take a while regardless of how impatient I am) so here goes. If MS Word is to be believed, it's 2002 words with the title, so the thing is 1997 words.
I hope it's cold enough for winter. I'm not too sure about the title but whatever, beer justifies a lot of things.
An Exposition of the Mind
Enough bitching, let the insulting/praising commence.
I hope it's cold enough for winter. I'm not too sure about the title but whatever, beer justifies a lot of things.
An Exposition of the Mind
Spoiler:
Enough bitching, let the insulting/praising commence.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Seconded on you can't blame DEEN about Ea. Or Gilgamesh.
Zero Gilgamesh is simply better written. I take it as Urobuchi being the superior author but hey.
OT: I am not particularly looking forward to this. If HF, definitely won't watch it seriously. Maybe some 'cool' episodes like Rin vs Sakura... but that's about it.
In fact, any route they pick up won't make much difference. Some routes have more cool moments, so I'll watch more. That's about it.
Since Fate/Zero any other Fate seems underwhelming to me.
Zero Gilgamesh is simply better written. I take it as Urobuchi being the superior author but hey.
OT: I am not particularly looking forward to this. If HF, definitely won't watch it seriously. Maybe some 'cool' episodes like Rin vs Sakura... but that's about it.
In fact, any route they pick up won't make much difference. Some routes have more cool moments, so I'll watch more. That's about it.
Since Fate/Zero any other Fate seems underwhelming to me.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
d(^_^)(^_^)d wrote...
I don't know if anyone here actually cares, but I sincerely apologize to anyone who was expecting the next part of Age of Anarchy any time soon. Suffice to say it won't be done until January at the earliest.Well at least now there is a timeframe. I'll bitch when January is nearing its end.
mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
mibuchiha wrote...
I claim Luca Trulywaath from Ar Tonelico 2.Livin' la vida loca or whatever it is.
Redoing this because of whatever full name rule.
https://www.fakku.net/forums/posts/4007566#4007566 for more info.