Fakku You! Rewrite in progress

Well I've had some manga ideas recently, and I feel like I wanna say tell you guys about them. Yes it's based off Fakku so please Jacob don't kill me if it seems stupid. Here it is my ideas beginning run-down.

Title-- Fakku You!

Setting-- Future earth

Genre--- Echii, Shonen, Mecha

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Title-- Awakened dream


Many years in earth future a great religious awakening has happened. All over the world people are being converted to believing in a strict,rigid, religion. Most if not the whole world has been converted. The church has become the government and practically rulers of the world. They rule with an iron fist that controls the world. The church as clean as it seems is actually corrupt. No one dares stand against its tremendous power...accept one man.

There's still one place the church can't control and thats the internet. A site appears one day that stands out amongst all the rest. It's name Fakku! It reveals to the world an ancient art form that long ago abolished by the church. Hentai has been released back into the world,but sadly it's short lived. The church hunts/tracks down the maker of the sight. When he is revealed/captured he is sentenced to death in a public execution that will broadcast all over the world. The man refers to himself as "Jacob".

One of the few members of the site, is a 17 year old boy who's alias is "York". He is a gifted young mechanic an engineer. He is a big fan and supporter of the site. He feels he can't let the execution happen and is compelled to save "Jacob". Only part is he only has a few weeks to prepare before the execution and he has no help. Later on another member of the sight who goes by"Noatakun" says he wants to save "Jacob" as well. With only the two of them they begin what seems to be a suicide mission to save "Jacob.

York begins developing a throw together army of ragtag droids with very little weapons. He then decides to unleash his "dream". His "dream" is a mecha that he's secretly been developing over a few years. They both decide it's there only real hope at saving "Jacob". York begins to feverishly work on it like never before.

York the mechanic and wanna-be pilot, and Noatakun the Hacker extraordinaire are going to attempt to take on the largest organization known to man.
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Yeah instead of making up names I decided to go with our internet aliases.

I don't have a name for "the church" so any suggestions would be nice.

I haven't talked Noata about this I just felt like he should be there.

If you guys like it I plan to do more, like add more people from our site to the Manga.

I'm not a writer, I'm only an artist with a dream. *^__^*

ill love it if i get a part; i believe others will say the same.

I love it assuming the intent is that we're enjoying a story while also laughing at the silly narcissism of it. I'm just hoping you'll pm people before assigning them roles.

Sounds like a really cool plot, but i gotta ask, when would the ecchi come into play?

Ecchi...is usually softcore jokes and panty shots, right?

(Joke about rukia and ragakitty goes here)

Church will, of course, have Mecha as well?

And, actually, referring to an evil organization by it's title often works just as well as giving it an evil name.

So, saying "The Church" would work just fine in context.

It sounds like a great idea, I think, to use people we know and love/hate in a manga.

I'm not an artist, but I'm fairly competent at story-telling. If you'd like any help, I offer it.

maybe.

thanks I'm glad you guys like it I think I might continue on this one. 2nd ep rundown later today okay guys. *^__^*

This could be a hit on the Site^^

esp if i'm involved.

pfft, if waars involved i am. and whatever he chooses as a weapon mine is sharper and stronger then his... and has lasers. its a pretty good story york and i think uzumaki is right, it could be a hit to fakku veterans. if i can help in any way possible either, just send me a pm.

That sounds very interesting. I'm looking forward for more info on the storyline. More importantly I will have a chance to see your artwork. :)

Also mecha = hentai mecha? (just kinda crossed my mind)

are you kidding? I HAVE A FUCKING GIGA DRILL, no one fucks with me. I'm like Kamina and post time warp Simon all in one and when i need shit to happen it happens.

I think your mistaking your self for me. *^__^*

@Temcor--- I wouldn't expect to see any art soon. I'm still trying to get better... a lot better.

buddy, you cant even comprehend my capabilities. i have a honda civic type r with a sweet sound system... and subwoofers in the trunk that shoot POISON BLOW FISH DARTS bitch. youll be enjoying the music and then bam, your paralyzed for 2 days straight. and if your a mech... ill dispense plasma grenades like the ones from lost planet and demolish you with head-light rockets while your disfunctioning.

if its about art, you should ask tkhnoman :roll:

"Fakku you!" 2nd chapter rundown.


Title-- H-DRIVE FIRE UP!
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York and Noata prepare for the day of the assault. The day has finally come for them to save Jacob. Finally preparations are being made to their rag tag army (if even that). York climbs into his mecha. He looks at picture of him and his deceased brother. York says to himself" Brother what are you trying to tell me. What was so special about this mecha? What made it different from all of the rest?".

At the beginning of the sunset of the day Jacob is lead out to his execution. A large Wooden pole stands in the center of a large stage. It's surrounded by bundles of sticks. Jacob is then tied to the pole. The leader of the "church" The Grand Cardinal walks up to a podium. He address the viewers of the execution(AKA the world) of Jacobs crimes and offenses.

He calls him a "Heretic and shameless indecent rat that will no longer plagues the world.". He speaks his final remark by saying " One who has committed heresy against our church will face a death by purging fire."

The guards begin to pour gasoline on the bundle of sticks. Jacob says to himself. "I'm I really alone in my beliefs, will I die such a humiliating death as this." he looks up strait ahead of him seeing some shadows. They begin to get closer. Once they begin to come into sight, Jacob is stunned by what he sees. A bare bones no armor mecha and a small group of droids are charging toward him.

The Cardinal is also shocked at what he sees. He orders his guards to attack. The gaurds are no match for York and his droid army. The battle seems one but this was far to easy. Suddenly From the Stage floor hatches open up revealing Scarabs(enemy mecha sized droid.) They open fire on the York's ragtag army. With these large droids in the fight all seems hopeless. York's mecha is battered by most of the shots and his droids are shot to pieces.

Noata in his computer console yells at York "Don't you give up now you've come to fare to lose! If You lose, Jacob dies and what hope does the world have of becoming free then!". York's mecha lies on the riddle with lazer burns and wholes. Noata jumps from his console into the driver seat of the small cargo ship they used to get there.

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York sees his brother's picture and yells out"I won't lose, I won't accept defeat!" His mecha rises up wards and is barely able to stand. The Scarabs fire at him but his mecha keeps walking forward. A confident yell comes from York "Hey Cardinal You can't keep a good Fakker down. You can't keep me down and you sure as hell can't keep my friends down." He points be hind him. His droids are still crawling on the floor advancing by any means possible.

The Cardinal responds back " Hah just because your standing doesn't mean you've won. All you've done is drag out your defeat." He orders the Scarabs to charge their beams maximum power.

While the guns are charging York sees something on his mecha's monitor. A program appears that says "H-Drive". York Yells back at the Cardinal" I still stand because I have a dream! It's not just my dream, It's Noata's dream to and I'll fight to the bitter end to achieve it today! I'm gonna do What I came to do and thats to save that man.* points at Jacob* NOW H-DRIVE FIRE UP!"

Red energy shoots from the mecha and York makes his mecha charge at the Scarabs. York shouts out " DIVINE FLAME....FAKKU METEOR!" Yorks mecha launches it self flying at the Scarabs. The Scarabs fire their cannons at York but their deflected by his mecha's energy. His mecha's is ripped apart as his flys at the scarabs. When the attack hits an explosion ignites. The Cardinal flees from the explosion via trap door on the podium.

Jacob watches in awe at the spectacle before him. *Yes Jacob was out of range from the explosion*. He says to himself "Poor bastard, I'll remember you well..." After the smoke start to subside a shadow can be scene walking out of the blast. It's York and he is scene carrying the brain core of the Mecha.

Jocob looks on astonishment saying " Who the hell are you?!"

When York reaches Jacob to untie him he says " I've abandoned My real name so just call me York okay." "Now where the hell is that Noata with our gettaway"

Sure enough the ship comes into view and eventually picks them up. They then fly off into the sunset.

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Yeah I know it looks really crappily done. I'm not a writer but if anyone that is a writer would like to make it look presentable your welcome to help. It would really be a appreciated if someone one did.

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Explinations

Scarabs--- Large mech sized droids, standard unit of the "church"'s military. I have a schetch of what they look like just know scanner eh it sucks being me.

Brain Core--- . Basically connected to its pilots brain. It feeds off emotion. Only York "currently" has one and is what unleashes the H-drive which is later explained. Also the brain core was developed by his brother who is know dead.

Droids--- robot minions. Humanoid structure standing erect. Size as an average human.

so far so good bub, how many chapters are you planning? you should pre emptiveley have an end in mind in order to clump the story line in chapters accordingly. ill see what i can do about the chapter itself, im no writer but i have confidence in my writing skills. gimme a day or so k?

He's gonna keep on writing till the world is free from "the Church".

Keep up the works :D

Every things been flying through my imagination so fast its like an electric storm of thought. I'm thinking 30 chapters but but I'm not sure because new characters change the plot completely, plus they have mechas to so that also changes the plot. Then we have the antagonists of the story who also change the plot. Ahh I'm going insane/cheered up.

\\I rewatched TTGL about 4 times this week 1/2. I need inspiration and I ended up crying a lot. If you've ever scene TTGL the picture below will explain why I'm crying. I'm honestly balling every time I see It because I have an emotional attachment to all of them.

also the picture below made me cry out even more! T.T

[font=Comic Sans MS]Kittan...Kidd....Zoushi...Jougan...Barinbou...Ailak.....Makken[/font]T.T