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This is what i get for getting addicted to naruto.

This needs text so your suggestions and scripts are welcome.

Rar Hi Rez files 16 pages
http://rapidshare.com/files/91127048/txsnarutodraft.rar

Well, I can't make any suggestions with regards to text, but I can offer suggestions on the art. First, the pose in the top frame on pg. 3 just seems awkward. Her head is either too large, or the torso just isn't curved correctly, or both. Second, I'm not quite sure what is going on in the middle two frames of pg. 7. I mean, I think I know what is supposed to be going on, but those two frames may need to be cleaned up or something. I can't see the action taking place. Lastly, I don't feel comfortable with Temari without her hair tied up. I would recommend either keeping her hair tied up or finding fanart without her hair tied up for reference.

Other than those things, good job. It has a nice frame arrangement, and there is very little disconnect between frames.

good points zeroOBK, I'll take a closer look when i'm going to be roughing in better poses. And about the hair, i'll see how much i can change it, it was my wifes suggestion to undo it. So i'll play around with it too.

Thanks for the c&c.

For additional clarity:

Undoing Temari's hair isn't really a problem unto itself. However, the loss of the style of her bangs also is a problem. Temari's entire character seems lost without the bangs and the tied up hair. It felt to me that Temari had been replaced by some other woman. As an analogy of sorts, it's like it started out with an Advent Children style, but once Temari's hair was untied, it went straight to realism.

Page 1 sketches, trying to incorporate the bangs as per zero's comments.

lorez
http://bp2.blogger.com/_6wmaiGMb0Vs/R7P2aFrlUBI/AAAAAAAAAK8/bVes6GJa66I/s1600-h/20080213001web.jpg

The bangs look good, from what I can tell. I have seen no references of that particular angle of Temari. I suppose I'd need to see a sketch of a more frontal view for me to make any comments.

Also, this sketch makes Temari's body look quite a bit older than she is. However, this is outside my area of expertise, so my comment may have no bearing at all.

due to devarts anti h policies i'm going to be setting up a website, so i'm taking time to learn how to do it with dreamweaver, so far i just have the hompage made.

Got Another webpage done, Open Items section and tomorrow i'll get some more temari sketches up.

Temari panel sketches, working on the body position, sorry so late i had some puter poblems over the weekend.

lo rez link,
http://bp3.blogger.com/_6wmaiGMb0Vs/R8MrFVrlUCI/AAAAAAAAALE/gqetPiinvoA/s1600-h/20080224001web.jpg

EDIT:
Hirez
http://www.femmesketchbook.com/Roughworks/20080224001.jpg

Hey Everybody, soory i've bben gone for a while but my puter caught a virus. So my buddy fixed it and i'm getting my set up finally back toghether. He installed a new hd and were still trying to pull stuff out of the old one.

Glad to have you back, and looking forward to stuff from you!

Sketch of one of my character's head.


Sketch of Toa's head, even though it doesn't look a thing like her.

GoodJob ZeroOBK.

Now that you've got a template of your character, try redrawing your character with different facial expresssions, just by changing the mouth, eye and eyebrow shape.

Just slip this one under the paper and draw over it to keep the shape.

Can I ask why? This character was created a long time ago, and it's not like I don't practice different expressions.

Just to check something, could you tell me how old you think those two look like?

hes about 17 shes about 15-16

its just good practice, escpeciallly if you start your drawings from the head, it can help suggest a pose

Nice sketches, you haven't updated your DA much ^^ ... looking forward to more of your sketches though the gallery doesn't seem to be working ...

Well, at least I got my character's age right. Toa's age is a little older than that. Anyway, I usually have a pose in mind before I even get out a sheet of paper if I draw a full body.

Now for some Works In Progress:

good to se you working on some stuff Zero0BK, just spend some more time refining it now, I usually have no patience to finish.

http://bp1.blogger.com/_6wmaiGMb0Vs/SD0ELXl9pWI/AAAAAAAAAOI/FmxWRH37XQQ/s1600-h/Temari.jpg

picture

That's interesting. The underside of her breasts has a bit too much black, though.

On a side note, do you have any tips for me on how to draw abs? I was working on my male WIP and I kept redrawing the abs because I want to reduce their definition while making it look natural.

yeah, i'll do some ab thing for you this evening, i would strat with just toning them down because the defined abs will look out of place with such a young character.

EDIT:
Hope you dont mind but i drew over, i think its easiest to explain that way.

http://bp2.blogger.com/_6wmaiGMb0Vs/SD4jmXl9pXI/AAAAAAAAAOQ/GtsGeAeVcSY/s1600-h/28747_WIP_M_123_466lo.jpg