Kaho's Manga(Update chapter 2 !!)
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Tegumi
"im always cute"
Krystel wrote...
Tegumi wrote...
kaho has 2 art threads again.YOU have a problem with that???
Quite possibly. I also have a problem whenever you make a thread. But the world doesn't revolve around me, does it?
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wow.downloading it nao,comment later.
edit:i know i'm kinda late but NICE!
great pencil stokes that makes it sketchy but not too rough,you were using a photo of shibuya's station at the 1st page,lol'd at page 3's bride selection (why you little!),you inserted your love for LEAF(games and the char design),krystel like imouto and the main character always breaking the 4th wall and blaming you.lol.
is yanagi kinoshita really have split personnality?can't wait for the continuation.
you know....if you manage to live in japan for a long time,you can actually enters the doujin circle in comic market for LEAF fan doujinshi (but i guess you already know it from comic party you LEAF lover).lol.
edit:i know i'm kinda late but NICE!
great pencil stokes that makes it sketchy but not too rough,you were using a photo of shibuya's station at the 1st page,lol'd at page 3's bride selection (why you little!),you inserted your love for LEAF(games and the char design),krystel like imouto and the main character always breaking the 4th wall and blaming you.lol.
is yanagi kinoshita really have split personnality?can't wait for the continuation.
you know....if you manage to live in japan for a long time,you can actually enters the doujin circle in comic market for LEAF fan doujinshi (but i guess you already know it from comic party you LEAF lover).lol.
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MRG wrote...
Krystel wrote...
Tegumi wrote...
kaho has 2 art threads again.
YOU have a problem with that???
Way to be aggressive...
Anyway I really don't see a point to another topic myself. Kaho could have just edited the first page of his topic, and posted it on the topic itself, a second topic is pretty much unnecessary.
Meh. Too late. XP What's done is done, no use "crying over spilt milk" right?
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Kaho-kun, I think you deserved a Fakku Artist title! Even Jacob has come and visiting you~!
When the next chapter is up?
When the next chapter is up?
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@FOG: I would be so honor If I joined LEAF fan doujinshi
@KURO:Thanks ! If I dont make CG , I think it'll take me 2-3 weeks to do the next chapter !! Cuz I drew a lots of Manga before I know how to make CG artworks !! Ruu...
@KURO:Thanks ! If I dont make CG , I think it'll take me 2-3 weeks to do the next chapter !! Cuz I drew a lots of Manga before I know how to make CG artworks !! Ruu...
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I just recently read the first chapter, pretty amusing and alot of cliches XD
Is the uniforms in Feeling Heart same as the ones in To Heart 2?
U have a unique drawing style I don't see it very much at all, maybe one manhwa or some other manga I forgot tho.
Plus it was kinda neato to see a manga that is probably still kinda in construction XD rough lines and all.
The first chapter is now saved in my Feeling Heart manga folder on my pc XD For whenever I wanna read it again.
Is the uniforms in Feeling Heart same as the ones in To Heart 2?
U have a unique drawing style I don't see it very much at all, maybe one manhwa or some other manga I forgot tho.
Plus it was kinda neato to see a manga that is probably still kinda in construction XD rough lines and all.
The first chapter is now saved in my Feeling Heart manga folder on my pc XD For whenever I wanna read it again.
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Uniform is based on TH's uniform !! and about " Feeling Heart " is the name of my previous Manga for a long time ago , I used that for my new Manga >.< !! Ruu...
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I'm not any good at being a critic for things like this so I'll just tell you that I read it and will read more if you make more.
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Not bad at all! I do have a few quips with the art, but of course art only improves with practice and time.
Are you using structural guidelines for your characters? If you just make their head a circle (to represent the skull) then draw the chin under, and then put hair over the skull, they'll look a lot better. As it stands now your characters look like the back of their head is flat or something. :P
Keep up the good work!
Are you using structural guidelines for your characters? If you just make their head a circle (to represent the skull) then draw the chin under, and then put hair over the skull, they'll look a lot better. As it stands now your characters look like the back of their head is flat or something. :P
Keep up the good work!
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yagaminoue wrote...
Not bad at all! I do have a few quips with the art, but of course art only improves with practice and time. Are you using structural guidelines for your characters? If you just make their head a circle (to represent the skull) then draw the chin under, and then put hair over the skull, they'll look a lot better. As it stands now your characters look like the back of their head is flat or something. :P
Keep up the good work!
Thanks Yagami !! I'll try my best next time ! Ruu...
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Finally chapter 2 is finished nao !! Hope u guy will like it !!
http://www.mediafire.com/?zz1kr4nkwym
Ruu...
http://www.mediafire.com/?zz1kr4nkwym
Ruu...
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chapter 2 page 10 middle left panel there is a grammatical error. It should be
"Just do exactly as I say", not "Just do exactly as I said"
of course, it wouldn't be wrong if you meant for him to say that after he explains the "plan" to Yanagi, but I assumed he was telling her the plan that moment so it should be in present tense...sorry if that was a little confusing
btw great story so far. Leaf references XD...still some more grammatical errors but I take it that english wasn't your first language so it's understandable. If you're seriously going to try and perfect this though, I suggest the use of more contractions so the dialog sounds more natural and smooth
"Just do exactly as I say", not "Just do exactly as I said"
of course, it wouldn't be wrong if you meant for him to say that after he explains the "plan" to Yanagi, but I assumed he was telling her the plan that moment so it should be in present tense...sorry if that was a little confusing
btw great story so far. Leaf references XD...still some more grammatical errors but I take it that english wasn't your first language so it's understandable. If you're seriously going to try and perfect this though, I suggest the use of more contractions so the dialog sounds more natural and smooth
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Sabers Praetor
Unlimited Lewd Works
good job kaho although some of the letters were hard to read without zooming in and nice kentaro yabuki reference ^^
