Fair Is Foul and Foul Is Fair

Fantastic job for a debut work, especially considering the length, but it did feel like the actual plot was a little all over the place. This is definitely the kind of story that would have benefit from more pages (asking a lot when it's already 30, I know), less sex, and a stronger resolution to tie things together.

All in all, it's a good one, but I feel like it lost its way once the fucking began, as the characters were implied to have developed a stronger relationship prior to the skate spot getting paved over. They hung out for literally months but never swapped contact info? She brought him there to fuck without any romantic attachment? Homie only spoke out against her self-degradation after the cheeks had been clappened?

I just feel like the author missed some potentially stronger plot beats to utilize here.

6.5/10 if I had to score it. Above average, but a good bit of room to improve. Good work.

Countering the idol-culture-puppy-mill, one jaded idol at a time. You love to see it.

Page 26…Grabbing onto her handlebars…Priceless.

Ok I guess that was vanilla. He did say he loved hanging out with her. Thow she did not say it back? What about the end it looks to me they went their own way.
Don't get me wrong, this was a very well written story. I really liked it, so !! YEA VANILLA !! Once again loved it, hope to se them again. Well yea hentai I'm out.

That was punk as hell. Rock on brother! \m/

Nice wholesome debut!

IMHO, it takes an above-average ero-artist to make his or her FAKKU Debut with a work featuring vanilla content, laced with an ample helping of Deep Shit (figurative, of course).

But it worked out fine, therefore:

"I'LL ALLOW IT!"

Now that's a vanilla debut!

-got the tomboy tag added.

That was a little sweet. Hope they go for round 2+.

She got quite the moves. And can even dance on top! *runs away because of the bad joke*