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You got a couple of grammar mistakes Jericho, but it's mostly comma splices and run on-sentences. There is one thought that was very confusing which you might want to go over again:
Read that part over and listen to yourself reading it then you will notice the error. Overall your story was very realistic even thought it was a fictional work. You are very with the usage of descriptive words. By doing so you are conveying what it is exactly that you want the reader to imagine when they read this.
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Read that part over and listen to yourself reading it then you will notice the error. Overall your story was very realistic even thought it was a fictional work. You are very with the usage of descriptive words. By doing so you are conveying what it is exactly that you want the reader to imagine when they read this.
Member Since
22 Jul 2009
Started lurking and being more active like 2-3 weeks ago now I think. First joined for games and nothing else.
22 Jul 2009
Started lurking and being more active like 2-3 weeks ago now I think. First joined for games and nothing else.
It would help if you were more specific. Since those can be any number of things, including games....
Also Kadushy has already mentioned most of the genres they can fall under.
Also Kadushy has already mentioned most of the genres they can fall under.
Chiwasu~
Welcome to FAKKU. I hope you enjoy your stay here as you have so far. Hope to see more of your posts. I also agree Yoko is hot and all.
Yoroshiku Ne~
Welcome to FAKKU. I hope you enjoy your stay here as you have so far. Hope to see more of your posts. I also agree Yoko is hot and all.
Yoroshiku Ne~
Knew from the start that was him. And here I gave that jerk the benefit of the doubt and was nice..... Well obvious is obvious, anyways nice on making this thread Long, lol.
Innoue Orihime is my pick, I just like her cuteness and clumsyness. She also looked pretty hot in the Arrancar's dress suit.
