Fruid Posts
awesome! xDDD nice start to the story, though it was a tad short. well hope to see more of ur works xDD least this answered some questions. how is the ranger story coming along anyways? :3
Quadratic wrote...
Problems I noticed:Some sentence structure was off.
Logic problem: You don't need to take your clothes off to run away from a fire.
Could've used better description, and felt rushed at time.
Paragraphs should be seperated by a blank line.
A bit too short.
That's really allI could notice though,it was pretty good for a start.
well that's also my opinion of this 3_3
and quad, ur new pic is.... um............ >3>"
wow....
Room101 wrote...
Count me in, if it's not any problem.Character type?
Evil jerkass of course.
rofl, i can guess ull bcome some last level boss later in the story then. o.O
Old - Jenkins wrote...
If i could suggest something .. .> Add more funny/hilarious events.
Make readers laugh, scared and excited at the same time ... sounds like a good idea.
well if he did, then this would b a mix of zombieland and L4D. >.>
and so what if zombies are somewhat being overused now? if this kind of creativity avoids the story from having some kind of Twilight relation im good xD
Kyuubi no Shinigami wrote...
I'll have to think about that Lone, not to sure if I can really work that in but I'll check to see if it might work.And seems someone doesn't like the story lol -rep for it already? Wow xD I think I know who my story butthurt =P
well then ill rep it back up! xDD n lol ok do waht u need, its ur story n all :P
uh id like part as well, n i like 2 b a splintercell like character (all sneaky n kills through the shadows)
sure they zombies, but they can die somewhat the same xD
giv me watever personality u see fit :P just let me b the killer in the shadow guy >:P
Kuro or Rive is a optional nickname :P
sure they zombies, but they can die somewhat the same xD
giv me watever personality u see fit :P just let me b the killer in the shadow guy >:P
Kuro or Rive is a optional nickname :P
wow, vhan is an ass >.> since thats the prologue, hope the new characters in later chapters some luck if they have to be with vhan...
so... a digger turned prodigy lives a simple life of playing music, war comes along and resistance groups use him as a symbol. rebel leader dies, people look to him as new leader, shall he accept the responsibility?
hmm if this is the general idea then i gess this is a good start. its just somewhat hard to imagine a digger with hands that master a cello. cause where would he get the education and such for learning to play the cello. 3_3
hmm if this is the general idea then i gess this is a good start. its just somewhat hard to imagine a digger with hands that master a cello. cause where would he get the education and such for learning to play the cello. 3_3
Deftera wrote...
ash became more childish, gary stayed the same, brock went all overboard with his "hitting on women" thing
FreeOtakuGhost36 wrote...
Resident Evil : AfterlifeSpoiler:
i have to give it.....
7/10
same T^T i hoped this movie would end it, but i gess there must b another next year >_< this movie was a mix of RE 4 and 5 (and i gess 5.5 since there was that mid-boss guy ._.) no leon or eda tho ;-;
i seem lost now? >_> did i just get infected? ._. cause the lion when a and scratched someone... >_> idk who though...
mibuchiha wrote...
Hah, nice. A perfect start for a journey. :Pi agree. always start a journey with some hardcore sex, right? xP
this will be worth reading :D
konata809 wrote...
my name is Jonah im new, i became a member yesterday ^^good to kno, welcome and have fun on fakku dude.
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