skoodlez Posts
yeah321 wrote...
skoodlez13 wrote...
come on, give a guy a break!
I got trolled by him for that, when your not around.
XD,i guess i missed a lot
yeah321 wrote...
Nya...read the chapter 1 3rd part.Imo you should put more words into describing each scene with extra detail, filling everything with direct conversations is too fast paced, sounds corny, and does not give the reader much infomation about the environment. Extra thoughts by the main character can be added between conversations to let the reader have more knowledge about the person who the main character is talking to, flashbacks etc. As volt said, its a little fast pace, everything happens too fast in just a few sentence without much detail. To be honest, I think you protrayed your story nearly into an anime with just subtitles text and a black screen.
Conclusion: more detail thanks
Just an honest opinion..
come on, give a guy a break!
KG989 wrote...
It might be a MUGEN mod. Though I think it's just a cool photoshopi just found this on general discussion
so im wondering if this is a game
lollercookiez wrote...
udou_akira wrote...
Harmonian wrote...
Asians can't dance.You obviously don't know what you are talking about.
Yep. That and I'm going to go ahead and add Kaba Modern in there too.
FACTS: kabba modern is short for filipino word "kababayan modern"
some of the jabbawockeez crews are filipinos ^^
Morning Star wrote...
skoodlez13 wrote...
Morning Star wrote...
skoodlez13 wrote...
Thank you sir!Lol Skoodlez I could've sworn you were in the VUVC army...
Well whatever as long as you stay loyal to zeph-sama...
what vuvc? i think this is my first time to join a group here in IB
lol you were on the first page
here
i just sent you a pm regarding this .
Morning Star wrote...
skoodlez13 wrote...
Thank you sir!Lol Skoodlez I could've sworn you were in the VUVC army...
Well whatever as long as you stay loyal to zeph-sama...
what vuvc? i think this is my first time to join a group here in IB
