My Big Booty Succubus Clown a.k.a Ass-Clown

I'm gonna be a bit blunt, since that's what you asked for.

technically speaking, I don't see any mayor problem with your character, so I'm skipping that.

the biggest problem here is that she lacks of the feeling of a main character. In short, if she were in a videogame, she would be another stage enemy instead of the boss.

her disguise is ok, but too plain. not something that would impress or make you remember her due to it's originallity. the hairdo is a bit too normal, for a clown you should be expecting an afro of something more appealing.

about the sexy part, I don't know if it can even be attained (as someone stated before, creepy + clown = no sexy). Maybe changing her attire and making her strike another pose could help, but that will kill the ass theme.

for a now, I think the best wold be check for references. my first sugestion is shaco, the demon clown from the game league of Legends, a good combination of clown & evil & smar-ass looking.

I hope this was useful to you.

I read that, but I guessed that the important events are when she's dressed as a clown (sort of "look, I'm clart kent (5 seconds later) LOOK I'M SUPERMAN! (all the remaining chapter); being her "normal look" pretty secondary. But if the clown transformation is just an alternate/secondary thing, then there's nothing to worry about, just show us how hot she looks in her normal suit please =P I'm kinda curious.

Well, she isn't a clown anymore! So far, a great improvement. The pose is not something I'd go for, but the art style is very, very good. I'd love to see some other (maybe less...exotic) poses from you for the next time you draw something

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I agree with this ^^

Well, to be frank, yes, but that's due to MY PERSONAL OPINION, since I'm not very interested in american drawing style and slutty dirty girls. I'm not saying that it's not unactractive due to your drawing, but due to my tastes. It's like, there are people that love huge tits, others dislike it. Like that. As an artist, I can tell that your drawing is really well done, and I'm confident that many people would find it sexy (I mean, I've seen publications that doesn't look half as good as your and they still got people that would pay for it).

You'r doing great, just that this is not something that fits my tastes.

That's not quite what I meant. I was thinking of poses in a similar manner to this or this

your drawing's are quite creepy as in like scary lol

besides that they look pretty nice.

i'd fap to it... jus so i can say i did

LOL

Yup. Your style fits more into american stuff. Usually in manga style, you hardly see lips, eyes are higher than wider for a human standart, you hardly see facial expression lines unless you are drawing old or mature people, the proportions of the head/face usually are more in an alienish shape, and the forehead/upper side of the head is bigger. The smiles HARDLY have the shape of the lips (usually, just curved lines instead of detailed ones, having a watermelon slice shape, for example), characters are usually skinny, with less detailed shape and in the female ones, no muscular lines.

Being the contrary, we have American style. Realistic face, detailed lips, detailed shape of the mouth, facial expression lines, human-shaped head/face, small eyes, muscles defined and shaped body.

Those are the main differences, and as you can see, yours is totally American. Which is really good given what kind of character you'r developing. In manga style, your character wouldn't look this creppy and slutty. That's why I'm certain that what you are doing is correct.

Like many people said, your art is very good but i don't find the character appealing. But I think that you could make some very nice stuff.

When she is without the costume she looks a bit better but she just isn't my style.

Besides that, I love your art.