leonard267 Posts

I have mentioned this to you in the PMs and I think I may as well mention it here. For me, it was not so much to do whether it is bland but more to do with me being completely lost with the introduction or rather the lack of it of characters and terms used. Like the Night Watch, Others, who are Gared, Will (who appeared out of nowhere) and Weymar.

Of course I had other problems with the prologue as well in terms of the style of writing. I hope I can elaborate on that as soon as possible, most likely by next week.

That is an accurate statement, I have to say. You should try reading it and see if you come to the same conclusions as me:

http://vk.com/doc-50747477_169577512?hash=add9da39798259c34c&dl=a66d6ae1a02f78d02e

This is of course directed at you and High.

Speaking of the Game of Thrones, I intend to do a review of it. 'It' meaning the prologue.

I want a map of that world!

And when are you going to post it as an event entry? As usual, my imagination or lack of it is making it difficult to understand the entry. You needn't worry though. I could not understand the Game of Thrones because of a lack of imagination.

You have the liberty to get other people or work with other people for that event. You can even base your entry on what other people have written so long as it is not a word for word replica of another person's entry.

I would like to see you come up with something at the Writing Section that I can whine and pine at. All of that aside, allow me to turn this place into some repository for whatever drivel my mind can conjure up. Do take note that I am not using bold or coloured font for this post. I suppose that must mean something.

If you have read my whining and pining at the Writer's Lounge, you might know that I am bad with metaphors. That said, the more I read words like 'escape velocity', 'galaxy' and 'orbit', the more I think that what is described here is not really doomed or unrequited love as high is trying to imply.

Seeing that you have written an excerpt of a space adventure for the Winter Contest, I strongly suspect that this is the same.

I had problems with some of the expressions you used because I am not so familiar with them, like "They were the mortar. The oak was the monument". Mortars and monuments don't seem to me to have much of a connection unless the monument was made of mortar.

Love to hear what you intended to convey in that short story.

I love being a Grammar Nazi!




YOU AREN'T SHOWING ENOUGH CONCERN! I DEMAND A WALL OF TEXT WRITTEN LIKE THE PROLOGUE OF THE GAME OF THRONES THAT IS LONG AND IMPOSSIBLE TO UNDERSTAND! HERE IS THE BLOODY LINK!

http://vk.com/doc-50747477_169577512?hash=add9da39798259c34c&dl=a66d6ae1a02f78d02e

EineKrone wrote...

animefreak_usa wrote...

The type B- supply is low... i found the medical cannabis in the store room F.

I'm B positive, maybe I could donate some~
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*adjust glasses*
Sir Leonard, could you sit on this chair?

[color=red]SHAN'T!

Shikinokami wrote...

All right, minions, gather up. I will not apologize for a series of unfortunate events, your low pay, selling medical cannabis to junkies, prostituting several unconscious patients, and selling your social security numbers and other important documents to Koreans. Not to count reducing all the funding of the other sectors to focus on cleaning dried shit and blood off the walls of the Asylum.


Also, I will be re-introducing myself to you all in a simple "Did You Know?" format. Now some facts on your doctor.

Dr Shino DYK!

Shino shines his equipments and doesn't take rape cases seriously?

Dr Shino DYK!

Shino is masochist, he forums.

Dr Shino DYK!

Shino does not eat pocky, rice, ramen, or sushi in futile attempts to emulate a culture he is not from?

Dr Shino DYK!

SHINO DOES NOT LIKE KITTEnS< PUPPIES< oR OTHER CUTE THINFGZ

Dr Shino DYK!

SHINo CaN RITE LikE A SIXTWEEN yeAR Old gURl!

Wait. I take that back. After seeing this, I comfort myself knowing that there are people more insane than me. Why, I feel more sane after reading this! I am no longer writing in pink!

Though I have to say, you are a very cruel man to be making fun of sixteen year olds who just want to indulge in some cyberspace fun. What is wrong with pretending to be someone you aren't? What is wrong with pretending to be a masochist even though you aren't one? What is wrong with pretending to be Japanese even though you aren't one? What is wrong in pretending to be a woman even though you aren't one?

Zetsuen? From the Chinese characters, I think it means "severing of ties"? You know some Japanese, am I right to say that?



Hello, xnine. Have you read my entry for the event?

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I noticed that you tried to write a story about her in the Writing Section. I was a bit lost until I read the character's introduction in the link you provided.

For me, it almost happened when I looked at some picture of some character, quite like the ones I saw in the link. The artist most likely did not intend to associate the character he drew with any background story at all. That almost made me want to come up with a story for that drawn character.

That happened quite some time ago. Right now, whenever I want to write a story it would be filled with references to what I see, read and hear, (especially the news). And after the story is done, I think I will forget about them and leave them behind. That was the case for me when I wrote the Mudslinging thread.

Link:
https://www.fakku.net/forums/writing-and-fanfiction/winter-writing-contest-wrap-up-campaigning-and-mudslinging

[color=#ff69b4]I DON'T WANT YOUR CONCERN!
I DON'T WANT YOUR FLITHY ARMS WRAPPED ABOUT ME!

Fallan wrote...

Blunt force trauma induced by a brick is best anesthesia.

[color=#ff69b4]I DON'T WANT TO BE ANAESTHETIZED BY BRICKS!

Shikinokami wrote...

You want them alive if you want to perform any surgery, not in coma, unless you want to fuck them, that is.

[color=#ff69b4]I DON'T WANT TO BE IN A COMA!

animefreak_usa wrote...

The type B- supply is low... i found the medical cannabis in the store room F.

[color=#ff69b4]I DON'T WANT TYPE B- BLOOD OR MEDICAL CANNABIS!

Shikinokami wrote...

We'll start a "donate for life" campaign and give crap-quality t-shirts in exchange. Fuckers fall for that around the world, every year. Don't take more plants than you need, we also need to sell some to junkies.

This patient needs diagnosis:

Spoiler:

I found that on the path to the cafeteria.

[color=#ff69b4]I DON'T WANT A DONATE FOR LIFE CAMPAIGN AND MADE IN CHINA T-SHIRTS!

RoyalElite wrote...

*Drag's local dumpster body into the Morgue.*

Ahh crap, I left a trail behind, I'm getting tired of cleaning this shit up.

*Leaving a voice message to Boss Man*

"Umm, Hi Boss man, I don't want to be that "guy" but by any chance do we have a janitor. I'm getting tired of cleaning after myself. For instance, Do you realize how hard it is to clean when you accident drop a jar of "pixie" dust right next to a fan. Not only did it get in my mouth, nose, and eyes, but it also went all over the ****'n wall. Ohh crap someone knocking on the door, got to go, Ciao"

[color=#ff69b4]I DON'T WANT DEAD BODIES OR PIXIE DUST OR JANITORS!


I DON'T WANT ANYONE'S CONCERN ANYMORE!

THIS PLACE IS KILLING ME IN THE INSIDE!

I NEED TO CHANGE! I KNOW INSANITY CAN BE CURED IF I STAND IN FRONT OF THE COMPUTER TYPING IN PINK FONT, PRETENDING THAT I AM IN SOME ASYLUM! I ******* *** KNOW THAT I CAN CHANGE!

It was an assignment someone asked me to do for him. I gave that person two answers, one serious and very banal, while this was the other one.

I would say that the views in this report are not what I feel towards the subject matter. I loved making it sound serious though, with suggestions that divorce wouldn't exist if marriage didn't, most pre-nuptial contracts are most likely to be between children and they would marry once they sexually mature, to fool readers.

Ayn ai tot ai woz orn drugz.

Well, I am in supposedly in charge of this asylum hospital anyway. This means I can usurp any position in the hospital when I feel like it, especially when I am on a L-267 antidepressant.

I have to tell you the truth that I might be mentally ill. Why do I make a habit of typing words into some "chatroom" depicting some action, like *Passing you a L-267 antidepressant*?

Don't I realise that this does not affect anything in the slightest? I am still unemployed, unhappy, unmarried and uncared for. I am still sitting behind a computer wasting my life away.

Excuse me, I am about to have a mental breakdown.
*Grabs some L-267 antidepressants but since these are just words on the screen, there can't be anything happening! There just can't!*

This is my entry:

Leonard267: A Report on the Place of Marriage by leonard267

If I made it long, CO2 wouldn't read it and I wouldn't be able to submit an entry for the event given how slow I write!

Not an A+?

As with any assignment title that is presented before my eyes, I felt as if someone was shouting the words at me, demanding that I comply to whatever that is contained within the title. As often as I tried to entertain the adage, "Sticks and stones may break my bones but words could never hurt me", I could not help but to feel threatened and even hurt by that title!

There are very good reasons for feeling that way. Failing to comply with the requirements of most assignments would mean a good tongue lashing from my teacher, the admonishment of my parents, the head-shaking of my peers and the ostracisation of society in general. However, this assignment was different. Allow me to furnish you with the details:

Search websites and my brain for information pertaining to these topics:

1. The role of males and females in marriage
2. Divorce rates
3. The impact for celebrity divorces and marriages
4. Religious or secular wedding ceremonies
5. Pre-nuptial contracts
6. The average age of married couples
7. Fly in / Fly out marriages

It felt like a loaded question designed to make sure that I could never give an answer that properly reflected what I thought. To make matters worse, it was not a topic that I am familiar with in the first place being young, carefree, distant from the worries of the world and of an age where I still have to complete school assignments and couldn't care less about impregnating some woman and forced to be by her side for the rest of my life.

Furthermore, it was a Moral Education assignment which is itself an oddity of sorts. Right and wrong can't be taught by regurgitating textbooks and listening to teachers, not least by doing an assignment! If it were a Sociology assignment though, I might accord it with more respect. Since it isn't and since it is very patronising and rude (never mind that all assignment questions are like that), I am going to respond in kind:

1. The role of males and females in marriage
Male impregnates the female. Female gets impregnated by the male. Both of them would then breathe down each other's necks for the rest of their lives unless one of them dies first.

2. Divorce Rates
They could be high; they could be low. They are existent anyway. Though if you throw away the concept of marriage, there couldn't be divorce to begin with, let alone divorce rates.

3. The impact for celebrity divorces and marriages
Man or woman on TV gets married. Nothing to do with me. What impact?

4. Religious / Secular Wedding Ceremonies
One ceremony is religious while the other is secular. Next question.

5. Pre-nuptial contracts
They are contracts that are pre-nuptial. I can't go any further. Do you really want me to talk about arranged marriages between children?! I don't want to go off sounding like a paedophile!

6. Average age of married couples
See answer to No. 2. and replace "divorce rates" with "average age of married couples". I don't see why you have to ask this though. Are married couples sensitive about their age like virgin schoolgirls?

7. Fly in / Fly out Marriages
I feel like picking up accounting or commerce after reading this. Is it some variant of the First in, First Out method of accounting? Well, both of them have the acronym FIFO!

I have doubts whether Fly in / Fly out marriages are about marriage since flying is involved. If you are married, especially with children, chances are you cannot go on a holiday whenever you wished. Then again, going by its name, it appears that things go in and go out in that marriage. Are you referring to intercourse by any chance?!

END OF ASSIGNMENT

With that, I submitted the assignment feeling very smug. For some reason this was assigned to me just before the holidays were about to begin. This means I would not be hounded by whoever that assigned me to do this at least till the holidays end.

Could someone tell me how long would it take for the man on the street to forget the contents of this answer?

I am sure you are referring to fictional women usually portrayed on a two dimensional surface considering that you included the word 'tag'? I shudder to think of having to deal with a person in the flesh who hides his or her feelings at the same time treating me in a horrid way.

PS: That said, while this might be an interesting chat topic, others might suggest that this falls under the "Random" section of this forum.

Not a problem though if you ask me. You can always change the topic of discussion.

Welcome! According to the description of this thread, I am the psychiatrist psychologist of this establishment who uses bold red font with the intention to stand out from the others only to end up making a big fool out of myself.

*Reads patient's problems. Attempts to process this information. Bone in the brain stops the processing this information resulting in a nonsense diagnosis.*

The problems you have described are very, very grave. Normally, bacterial disinfection and months long mental therapy would be in order. But since I know nothing about hematopathology, I am going to shove her packets of L-267 antidepressants instead like the typical NHS General Practitioner. Antidepressants solve everything, you know.