NeoStriker Posts
futafapper wrote...
I will finish saya no uta before I start on katawa shoujo.SAAAAAAAAAAAAYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA! I WOULD'VE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, DAMMIT!
If you all know me, I'll probably make a thread screaming what I think of the game at the top of my lungs sooner or later.
It's a home drug test to see if you're really getting high on weed? Are you supposed to turn yourself in if it turns out positive? Lol
school-girl wrote...
Xenon wrote...
A fascinating read, you have a talent for writing very poetically. I rather enjoyed it, and it wasn't too difficult to grasp a hold of.I always encourage original writing, but if you're taking suggestions in order to grow your writing ability, which I also respect, I'll oblige once or twice but only about half-way. I want to fuel your originality somehow.
I would like to read a story set in the modern world of a romance doomed to fail because of various reasons, but harmony is found in the temporary embrace despite their situational reasons. You can consider it a modern Romeo and Juliet if you must, but you don't have to settle for opposing houses. Let's say illness, or social class separation, perhaps relocation.
I'll leave it up to you, but those are my guidelines: Doomed and yet regardlessly passionate.
That's what my intentions are by making this thread, I always think that writers always have room to improve.
And believe it or not, when you said a love that is "doomed" to fail, I instantly thought of Romeo and Juliet, what with the prlogue and the "star crossed" lovers and all. But that does sound like an interesting suggestion, it kind of made me think of a situation similar to in the game of Fallout, where there could be some kind of radiation disaster...I'll think more about it on Thursday or Friday if you turn out to be the one with the most feed back on your idea. So far, it seems like NeoStriker is on board with you. Sort of xD
Unable to come up with your own ideas and fuel them with your own emotions and feelings, yet still proud of your own ability to understand the complexities of the human heart enough to make it bloom beautifully with words; that may have been why you have decided to write stories this way. I have a feeling you have been plagued with poor executions of brilliant ideas that you found profound.
You sick motherfucker. Grrrrrrr...
That was good. You know emotions and feelings well. My suggestion is also like Xenon's; in fact, it was going to be my Christmas story. Please write a story about a man committing suicide in the snow being saved by a girl he loves that he will never be able to be with.
That was good. You know emotions and feelings well. My suggestion is also like Xenon's; in fact, it was going to be my Christmas story. Please write a story about a man committing suicide in the snow being saved by a girl he loves that he will never be able to be with.
Yea, I don't get what the fuck it's trying to say in that third paragraph. It's saying that the requirement noted above, "operate steathily, covertly, and silently" was based in the rationale that those who are perfect assassins would thus be anonymous killers, and thus, incapable of being Heroic Spirits. But because the Grail apparently really wants to have assassins in it's war, it takes Hassah, even though the Heroic Spirits it summons should generally be clearly "good". And so I reread it and tried to explain it, as in my paragraph shows.
Rise-chan wrote...
NeoStriker wrote...
The condition to be an Assassin is to be able to operate steathily, covertly, and silently. This would normally mean no assassin would ever be able to qualify for status as a Heroic Spirit. Hassah can qualify because he was the leader of an apparently large and substantial organization, where only his title was passed down, thus he still remained covert while being famous at the same time. After this, I'm not sure. His organization could be so large that they are able to make the Grail see Hassah as "good". Perhaps because it is merely a title, the actual person could've been good, even though others would see "Hassah" as evil. Perhaps the Heroic Spirit simply cannot be evil, meaning Neutral and Good Heroic Spirits can qualify.You're not on Ether pad. >_>
Yea, I lost the link. Don't have it on this computer, and I haven't got it memorized. Send again please.
The condition to be an Assassin is to be able to operate steathily, covertly, and silently. This would normally mean no assassin would ever be able to qualify for status as a Heroic Spirit. Hassah can qualify because he was the leader of an apparently large and substantial organization, where only his title was passed down, thus he still remained covert while being famous at the same time. After this, I'm not sure. His organization could be so large that they are able to make the Grail see Hassah as "good". Perhaps because it is merely a title, the actual person could've been good, even though others would see "Hassah" as evil. Perhaps the Heroic Spirit simply cannot be evil, meaning Neutral and Good Heroic Spirits can qualify.
