Let's make a Hmanga!

I think its pretty good but maybe the girl should be walking in instead. Besides that, it's very good.



I really liked it. The only problem now, is that I can't wait to see the next part

Wow. Looks like this is working out. The script looks like it's coming along pretty good. I do think that the guy thinks a bit too much, maybe it's just me.

Oh those are really good! Wow! Okay so I worked from 9pm sunday night to 9 am yesterday then from 2pm to 9pm yesterday. But I'll be here today. I'll start messing around with those and get some lineart type stuff done.

Thanks alot and it's possible because I haven't cleaned it up yet. I was just trying to make him relatable.



That sounds really harsh! Be sure to relax and not overdo it :)

Hows this for a sketch of the first page?

That's pretty good. Keep it up :)

Should I color each page after I make completely finished lineart?

If you wanna make it in color, that sounds like a great idea. Do whatever you can that you think will make it look nice.
Do you want me to "direct" the sexual positions?

Yeah that'd be awesome. I think it'd make easier to get the transitions from one sexual position another

Here is a new concept page number three...


Now krakis mind you that I think the scene where the girl describes what her and the boyfriend do is better off a flashback...

I state this because we have too know our audience and well I figure people want too see some type of detail on what she is explaining too the guy...

I would also like krakis too write some more in vivid detail describing the positions the girl and guy will be doing on the stairs(looking forward to it).

Freakychan...The way you drew the first concept page was fucking GREAT!

Hahahaha I'm glad you think so! Its just really sketchy though. I'll keep sketching away on the other ones!

For the flashback, I didn't think of that, but it's a really great idea and I'm sure that like you said, the audience would like to see the explication in drawing.
Thanks for encouragement, and I will try my best to make it as hot as possible

:3 I definitely think your sexplots ideas will be awesome.

Hows this for the second page

Wow, those are some really great drawings!
Thanks for the encouragement again!
Btw i won't have regular access to a computer for the next week so i wont be on as much but il try my best to when I can

XD I'm glad you like them! I'll keep doodling over the pages that they make. Don't worry about how long it takes, I've got quite a bit on my plate also so I totally understand!

My heart got dammit...Thee sketches they are beautiful!

Starting now and the next few pages I will be sketching your character designs from here on into the concept pages. You may change them as you see fit...

I'm glad you really like the sketches XD I only spent a few minutes on them though. I'm hoping the finished versions I can get some screentones and what not in them and shading. Maybe even color each page :D

And yeah, I really think your sketches help me out. They're really awesome guidelines hehe

man, not gonna lie these layout are horrendous and page 3 is very cluttered in my opinion :/

What do you think should be done in order to fix the layouts? I honestly suck at that sort of thing and any crits are totally awesome.